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for A new path to power

by DarthCronos

schedule March 19, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Not bad so far. The formatting and spelling could use some improvement, and the chapters could stand to be longer/more eventful (especially some erotic content). But you've got the start of a good story here so far.

If you ever want a hand with formatting/spelling, spitballing ideas, or even a little roleplaying (I'm into Star Wars), just send me an e-mail at theirishapple@gmail.com.