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August 18, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Without a doubt one of the best yuri pieces i've ever read. Sir if you don't write more of this i will track you down and force you to!
How about a follow up with some solo with that big ol' vibe? Maybe chie loses a forfeit and yukiko has a special vibe chie has to demonstrate for her?
=D
5 stars 10/10 100% LOVE it!
How about a follow up with some solo with that big ol' vibe? Maybe chie loses a forfeit and yukiko has a special vibe chie has to demonstrate for her?
=D
5 stars 10/10 100% LOVE it!
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July 12, 2010 at 12:00 AM
totally awesome, sexy build-up with a realistically sexy conclusion. great job!
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July 12, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Ha! Man, today I thought, this is the day! The day The Aeon Bond will take back its position of most recently updated story! And it did...for about half an hour. Props to writing so fast. It's got that sense of...reality, like this could totally happen if the Persona writers wanted it too. None of it seems forced. Good job!
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July 12, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Good job on the latest chapter.
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July 10, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Nice job on this chapter, though there was a problem with this one sentence:
"Rolling her eyes, she momentarily rolled her eyes..."
You shouldn't have written it like that.
"Rolling her eyes, she momentarily rolled her eyes..."
You shouldn't have written it like that.
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July 9, 2010 at 12:00 AM
this part was REALLY well written. it was very sexy, but the part leading up 2 the light action was really well done, very nice perspective on them. i like it lots! but im looking 4ward 2 the next chapters hot stuff a lot lol
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July 7, 2010 at 12:00 AM
heh, "W-Well anyway, let’s go get wet! I mean, uh, have a swim!" That is simply excellent. Again, good writing, and good vocabulary as well. Looking forward to more.
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July 5, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I'm very encouraged by your introduction to this story. You've done a great job lining Chie with appropriate emotions and qualities, including the natural anxiety/eagerness that she feels anyway (even more so of course in this situation). The pace is slow but that's not a bad thing, especially considering this couple. A wise choice picking up on a subtly hinted at relationship in the actual game as well. You've also got the most appropriate use of Chie's 'don't think, feel!' catchphrase, which in some other stories I've read is used but sounds a bit too cheesy or forced. I look forward to future chapters. Keep going, in my opinion you're doing very well!
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July 4, 2010 at 12:00 AM
plz continue, these 2 dont get any fics about them and its terrible cuz they make such a good coupel