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by SethZeltzer

person CatAthem
schedule July 31, 2012 at 12:00 AM
I had a little trouble reading some parts fluently and had to re-read them, because some commas that weren't placed made me read things wrong. And I noticed a few words missing which made the sentence's meaning change, but that is expected when writing late at night. I have the same problem.
Otherwise, for a First, it's pretty good. You got the personalities pretty well, and I wouldn't mind reading more of your stuff - especially concerning Phoenix Wright.

C-A