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for Undying

by redmoonrising

schedule October 3, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Great story! I think the first chapter is a bit useless, but the second chapter was amazing. It was descriptive and had great imagery.
person Omega
schedule October 2, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Not too bad for an opening chapter. You did a good job building each character's mannerisms, and the fight with the bear was well paced. Update soon.
person Omega
schedule September 30, 2008 at 12:00 AM
This looks interesting. Hope to see the first chapter soon. ^^