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for A Sliver Of Light

by MelonBear

person The Ambassador
schedule January 7, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Your story concept is very good and the you do a great job of getting it across on paper. The only problem I see is that sometimes you say the same thing twice, making it a little redundant. This sory is good, but with a little proof reading and editing it could be great. Keep up the good work ;)
person The Ambassador
schedule January 7, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Second chapter was a little better but your still having the same problem. Very interestded to see where this is going your doing a good job thus far. Hope everything works out ok with your surgery so you can pick this up again soon.
person acky
schedule December 19, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I like it. Interested in reading more
person Anon
schedule February 19, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Unfortunateley, no ideas to help you come to mind, all I can say is that this fic is really good. Would greatly appreciate it if this story was continued. P.S. i know this is a lame review, but i'm not used to reviewing.
person dragoonice
schedule January 8, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Please Continue. I Like Where This is Going And Im sick And Tired Of All the Yaoi Everywhere. Unfortunately I Cannot Be Your Beta As im Viewing This On my Cell Phone.
person Anonymous
schedule November 25, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Very good story, please continue!!!
schedule September 14, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I'm intrigued and would like to see more and to see where you'll take this. I would like you to please update when you get the chance.