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for The One to Conquer Queen

by MidnightElegance

person TheSky
schedule April 20, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Bloody good stuff.
schedule April 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I'm not 100% sure, as it's been a while since I've played a Suikoden game, but I believe that by the time Queen and Elaine would be serving in their respective units, the Scarlet Moon Empire would have long since become the Toran Republic, so Elaine's calling it by the former name is incorrect. At the very least, she'd say "former Scarlet Moon Empire," if you want to avoid using the not-100%-established-as-canon name Toran.
person Fire37
schedule April 12, 2007 at 12:00 AM
This was very good. Very good characterization of both Queen and Elaine. I have no trouble believing that these are the characters I so liked from the game.

I liked the little details like the aphrodesiac being from Scarlet Moon and even your talking about the scribbled labels on the medicine bottles. (silly, I know...but something about that just brings the story to life)

Excellent and very hot sex scene. Again...very descriptive...I had no trouble visualizing what was going on.

I especially like the part where they fuck each other with the hilts of their swords...underlines that these are warrior women...plus the way they seem to be trying to defeat the other by fucking harder.

I enjoyed this immensely.