rate_review Reviews

You have a lot of repetition and sentences that seem like you wrote one thing then went back and changed what was there, but forgot to take out the part you wanted to change.

For example:

Why didn’t he meet Roxas until before he made his decision on becoming a member?

You've got an interesting idea here, and a good beginning. If you ever choose to come back to this, I'd like to see how you develop it, especially given that everyone except for Roxas is going to remember his relationship with Axel.

Thanks for sharing, and happy writing!