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I liked it! very nice fic!

Uhh...Alucard isn't a dunpeal. He's a pure blood, the last of his race. He demonstrates the fact in both the anime and the manga. As a fellow writer, I understand taking a different veiw of a charactor, but changing them in such an essential way hurts their place in the story. "Passion can disolve even the strongest of bonds, but beyond that, blood binds all." So passion can over come his feelings, but not who he is. You shouldn't try to either.

I really liked this story. It had good plot and a really sweet Lemon scene. A few points you could work on: 1) You could use a good beta. Spelling and grammer need a little work throughout the story. 2) It kind of feels rushed. I realize I haven't read your other story, which I intend to, and your characters could possibly be more fleshed out in it, but it felt like I was getting tid-bitted on Iria's background and personality. And it really goes beyond character development; The whole story felt slightly rushed and could use a little extrapolation. Don't be discouraged though. I don't mean this review to sound bad; I'm hoping it helps you. ^_^ I really liked this story. Really. And I would love to read an updated/edited version. Keep it up and Kudos! ~NekuYasha

Okay people, if you're going to leave me a review fine, but no flamers!! I write stories for the reader's enjoyment & get $0. I'll accept polite critisim, but no flames. I'm sure if you wrote a story you wouldn't want any either. Thanks.