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... Well, that's sad. You had a really good story going there; my biggest complaint about it would be that Ansem is out of character, but then again, who really knows how he thinks?

I know it probably won't change your mind, but I would really like you to continue this story.

Also, to most of the above people who reviewed:

1) Don't jump to conclusions. Ever. It's a long swim back...
2) Those are some of the least helpful reviews I've seen in a while; then again, I'm new here.
3) Don't just tell someone their story sucks. Tell them how to improve it.

Also, if the author says that it's not a Mary Sue, at least give them the benefit of the doubt...

Um... this isn't anything new.. But it'ss your story. Whatever. It could use a better 1 vchapter though. Not many are gonna wanta read thIS.

the only thing that's orignal in this fic is the falling for ansme thing. odther than that hter's nothing inatesting about this fic.

I don't mean to seem rude... but many of these kind of fics have already been done. Where some mysterious girl comes in and she has an unknown destiny 'cause she'll play some big role in saving the world... er, something like that.

-Le sigh-

Mary Sues and Mary Stues in other words.

It's been done before. Nothing new... there are too many where the author puts herself in the story, doing what she would do if she was in it, being paired with their choice of male in KH or FF, maybe even another made-up character. And the author seems to make only a few embarrassing things happen to the character and most of them, she's able to draw a conclusion too quickly. Or maybe she gets knocked out and when she wakes up she's like: "Where am I?" and she's surrounded by either a bunch of the original characters or is all alone and gets something magical and crap...

Again, I don't want to seem rude, but this is some of the muck us other authors have to trod through to find a good fic out of a hundred, even when it's not yaoi...

I respect that you wish to put your idea to paper/screen; and you hope your fic will be one of the few to make it to the top, but you need to be a bit more creative when it comes to this sort of thing...

If you want to rant at me for this, go ahead... e-mail's in my profile or above this review...

~XxX Chains XxX~

please update. this is getting interesting. ive never seen someone fall for ansem before. :)