The Ghost of You
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Category:
+A through F › Devil May Cry
Rating:
Adult ++
Chapters:
5
Views:
3,448
Reviews:
14
Recommended:
0
Currently Reading:
0
Disclaimer:
I do not own the Devil May Cry game series, nor any of the characters from it. I do not make any money from the writing of this story.
The Ghost of You: Author's Notes
“The Ghost of You”
Author’s Notes
As with any piece of writing, the author finds one’s self influenced by one’s environment and circumstance. Each nuance of life works itself into the style of the writing and creates a unique flair that always leaves some impact on the reader. There are those who will love a story, and there are those who will hate it.
“The Ghost of You” is a fanfiction that attempts to symbolize the nature of love – indiscriminate, and loyal. Of course, this story will likely disturb those not accustomed to this fandom, but for those who don’t bind their self-proclaimed morals about them so tightly, I hope to have pleased you.
This is, above all things, a tale about love overcoming all things. While this story doesn’t sport a happy ending, as most would expect for such a concept, the meaning stays true throughout. The brothers lash out at each other, but the underlying care they have for one another brings them together ultimately. Was this story ever meant to have a happy ending? No, not really. Although I hadn’t originally intended on writing the fourth chapter, I felt that it gave the work a more conclusive ending. While I don’t mind cliffhangers, I didn’t want to be asked to write more – more out of the temptation that I would rather than not wanting to accommodate to a fan’s request. So, I decided to go with a fourth chapter.
Well, now that you’ve seen the formal, serious thoughts on this fanfic, how about some point-by-point thoughts? I promise not to be so...proper...about it. ^_~
***
First and foremost, you should understand the title of the fanfic, since it isn’t alluded to anywhere in the story. The title comes from one of my original inspirations to write it – a song. No, this isn’t a songfic; I just tend to get my ideas from sources like that. The piece is called “The Ghost of You” by My Chemical Romance. Just a day or two prior to the first time I heard it, I had beaten Devil May Cry 3. As usual, my mind whirled at every song I heard, thinking up stories and music videos for that game. I had fallen in love with Vergil’s character, and the possibility of utilizing that persona somehow was beyond my resistance. As I listened to the song, the parts of my fanfic seemed to fall in place, though it would certainly be a sorrowful story. That was okay. Serious is my specialty. So, I went with it. Using “The Ghost of You” as a reference, I began writing. For your convenience, the lyrics are posted below.
My Chemical Romance - "The Ghost of You"
I never said I'd lie and wait forever
If I died we'd be together now
I can't always just forget her
But she could try
At the end of the world
Or the last thing I see
You are
Never coming home
Never coming home
Could I? Should I?
And all the things that you never ever told me
And all the smiles that are never ever
Ever...
Get the feeling that you're never
All alone and I remember now
At the top of my lungs in my arms she dies
She dies
At the end of the world
Or the last thing i see
You are
Never coming home
Never coming home
Could I? Should I?
And all the things that you never ever told me
And all the smiles that are ever gonna haunt me
Never coming home
Never coming home
Could I? Should I?
And all the wounds that are ever gonna scar me
For all the ghosts that are never gonna catch me
If I fall
If I fall (down)
At the end of the world
Or the last thing I see
You are
Never coming home
Never coming home
Never coming home
Never coming home
And all the things that you never ever told me
And all the smiles that are ever gonna haunt me
Never coming home
Never coming home
Could I? Should I?
And all the wounds that are ever gonna scar me
For all the ghosts that are never gonna...
I found that my accuracy in following the lyrics rose and fell as I wrote, but I felt as if the mood remained constant. The first chapter and the end of the second are probably the best examples of my most accurate moments.
Other songs that inspired me to a lesser extent along the way included:
3 Doors Down – “Behind Those Eyes”
A Perfect Circle – “3 Libras”
Cold – “Cure My Tragedy”
Disturbed – “Guarded”
Evanescence – “Missing”
Gary Jules – “Mad World”
Nine Inch Nails – “And All That Could Have Been”
- “Leaving Hope”
- “The Perfect Drug”
One Less Reason – “Favorite Color”
Savage Garden – “Gunning Down Romance”
Sevendust – “Skeleton Song”
SpineShank – “Forgotten”
Submersed – “Hollow”
Theory of a Deadman – “The Last Song”
Vanessa Carlton – “Twilight”
Hmm...that list turned out longer than I thought. Well, such is the way with creative inspiration. I’m not going to bother with the lyrics with all of those, because...you know why. It’d be waaaaaay too long.
Now that the main muddle is out of the way, I’d like to do a run through my story and pick up a few points for explanation or personal thoughts. I’ll start with technical details and move on to the creative points.
- chapter titles – I did my best to keep them simple, though my often long-windedness would argue with that. Mostly, I tried to capture the theme of the chapter in a word.
- those ominous intros at the beginning of each chapter – again, like the title, I wanted to set up the reader for what I was going to put them through. The one on the second chapter is my least favorite. It only really makes sense to me, I think.
- chapter length – okay, I know that the second chapter is ungodly long, but there’s a reason for that. Originally, that was what I wanted to write. My entire fanfic would have portrayed them as teens at first. Then, I decided to add other parts, because those ideas also interested me. Had it just been that chapter acting as the entire fanfic, you better believe that I would have had Dante and Vergil doing each other in that chapter, instead. ^_~
- style – I don’t use many simple sentences. You might have noticed that. The reason for that is because I like to ramble. Well, it’s not the only reason...it’s also because I like to use them for dramatic effect. If my entire story were littered with them, then they wouldn’t stand out when I wanted them to.
- no indenting, but spaces between paragraphs – I like the look of it. It’s cleaner, and it makes it easier to find a particular part again.
Creative Points
- out of character Dante – I’m so sorry for this. My brain thinks in scorning sarcasm, so Dante’s approach to humor is foreign to me. He acts like...well...a dumbass...and despite how I may love him for that, it’s just not something I’m good at writing. On my good days, I can do wry humor very well, so parts like the beginning of the memory section in Chapter 2 came out great. Then, as the story went on, Dante slowly became more and more angsty and angry. Considering the story, I guess it’s not impossible that he’d react that way, but I still feel like something was wrong.
- Angie and her parents – I really wanted to show Dante attempting to interact with people who are basically normal. God fearing people. Previously happy people. This just happens to be a bad break for them. As for Angie...I don’t know. I was a weird little kid, old beyond my years, so I was trying to portray a normal little girl in the way that I thought she might act.
- telepathic communion with the fire spirit – you have to imagine that Dante would have picked up some tricks like that along the way. Certainly, not every demon is out to kill him – at least, not before he learns something from them.
- sand and blood – depending on the demon, some bleed and some turn to sand when injured or killed. Just in case you didn’t know that, so you don’t think I’m schizophrenic with my descriptions.
- Dante runs after killing Angela – you never see him willingly attack a human in the games – I mean, Lady has to attack him countless times to aggravate him enough to do it. Thus, I imagine that he doesn’t sit very easy with taking a human life. Also, there’s no way he could have talked himself out of that situation. So, he ran.
- “twin link” – it was a passing thought that turned into a centerpoint of my plot. If Dante can sense demons and hear voices in his head, then he can hear Vergil, right? Again, it’s another interpretation on my part. Then again, aren’t most of these points...?
- back and forth banter between the twins – writing conversations between the boys was both the hardest and my favorite part. They don’t exactly finish each other’s sentences, but they have learned each other’s behavior so well that they always have some witty comeback for the banter.
- happy Eva – for Dante to come out with the kind of personality he has, his mom had to have been pretty supportive. I can’t say that I know much of anything about her character, so it’s just an interpretation.
- Carver High School – a name that I just randomly pulled out of my ass. No relation to anything.
- “Sparda” last name – oh, come on. That’s just cute. ;p
- Star Wars – the original trilogy is my favorite series of movies. I’m such a nerd.
- “licking the wounds” – to me, Vergil seems to embrace his demonic side more than Dante does. So, I figured that he’d be the first to “make a move,” so to speak, not even realizing that he was doing it. I was worried about how this part would turn out, and I’m still not sure that it feels right.
- intimacy – for much of chapter two, I depict the twins in a dreamy, romantic state. I don’t mean for it to come off as corny. More like...they’ve both found someone who can understand everything, so they bask in each other’s presence to indulge in that comforting feeling.
- rape – again, I believe that Vergil embraces his demon heritage more, so he’s more prone to violence than Dante.
- foreplay – I didn’t want to have the twins have sex in chapter two, because I had it planned for chapter three. Like I said, though, if this had been a one shot, they would have done it.
- Eva’s death – my story couldn’t have progressed without this scene, though I liked her sunny character. I needed to give the twins some motivation to go their separate ways, and this seemed like the best way. The scene felt drawn out to me, but pretty much everything in chapter two was as well, so...yeah. *shrug*
- swords and amulets – I’m positive that Eva would’ve had the amulets. Dante even says in the first game that they belonged to her – well, his did at least. As for the swords...Yamato had to have been somewhere where Vergil could have found it. I decided to make his mother its keeper. Rebellion...it made the transition easier to keep the swords together, so I did.
- argument in the police station – my thought was simply that Dante needed someone to lash out at. Remember, step one in a traumatic situation is denial. Step two is anger. Dante was obviously at two.
- “Jump. Leap. Fly.” – knowing that they were going to leave, what did it matter if the twins showed off their abilities? At this point, they had both made an unconscious decision to accept their lineage.
- crossroads – after Eva’s death, this term becomes very important in the fanfic. While it is used quite literally, it’s also symbolic of the separate paths Dante and Vergil are choosing to take.
- rain – essentially, a symbol for cleansing. As Dante looks for Vergil, he becomes less anguished and more hopeful. The dreary mood I set in the first chapter is lifted slowly.
- Mimicry – completely made up, right along with the demon classes. The more I described the monster, the more I realized it sounded like a Hell Vanguard. That was an accident. *sigh*
- Tony Redgrave – another shot in the dark. I know that the name is on the side of Dante’s guns, and judging from other fanfics and debates, I figure it’s safe to say that he knows our resident hunter. Of course, if other sources are to be believed, then Tony = Dante. I don’t know which to believe, so I went with Tony being a different person entirely.
- Untouchable, Holy Water, and Yellow Orb – all references from the first game, though the latter two appear in the third. After playing DMC on DMD! Mode, Untouchables become all too important...
- second meeting of the twins – I wasn’t sure how to start this, and Dante’s reactions might seem stiff. The whole exchange doesn’t really feel like a reunion, but given the circumstances, I suppose it makes a little sense, at least.
- Dante’s apartment – gah. I know nothing about guys’ apartments or rooms. So, I just tried to take basic imagery from his office and translate it into what his “crib” might look like.
- Tab – oh, yes, cancer-causing soda. And it tastes horrible to boot. I figured that when Dante wasn’t having a keg that he was probably having a Tab.
- Vergil’s hatred for humans – had to start somewhere, so I chose to put it in his childhood without Dante. The reason I gave was logical, but not very creative. I couldn’t think of anything better.
- “Laura” and “Urkel” – I was so hooked on those 80s/90s sitcoms when I was a kid. I don’t have the foggiest what made me think of Family Matters at that part, but it made me giggle every time I read over it.
- the sex scene – oh, yes. I knew it was going to happen, and I was steeling myself for when I’d finally write it. Believe it or not, that was my first one ever. I didn’t really know where to go at first, but I’ve read enough yaoifics to have some clue of what is pleasing to the reader – that being me, primarily. I hope I did well.
- the demons attack! – happy ending my ass. ;p
- Descent – it took me a while to come up with a good title for the chapter. I knew I wanted something to represent Vergil’s quest for power, and it occurred to me that he seems to get less and less rational (and patient) as the game goes on – or, at least after he meets Dante again. Thus, you get the “descent into insanity” theme.
- first person POV – why? As you probably noticed, this fanfic has been more the story of Vergil than it has been the story of Dante. As such, I really wanted to personalize this chapter to him. None of the text or actions within the scenes was altered from the original game (in fact, I spent quite a lot of time going back to the game and making sure I had it down word for word and action for action). I did add in a few untold scenes of my own, but I largely tried to keep it focused on Vergil’s inner self – on his slow descent into madness.
- “pros and cons” – heh. Heh. Heh. You have to imagine that Vergil has a sense of humor, no matter how dark, just from the way he interacts with Dante. Quite honestly, that’s probably my favorite section in Chapter 4
- Mary – not too much to say about this one, except that you have to admire her efforts in the game. Even though she’s gullible, she’s still one tough bitch, and I think Vergil would appreciate that.
- the final section – as the fanfic goes on, “sacrifice” becomes more and more important. Vergil sacrifices his sanity for power. Dante sacrifices his love for his morals. Finally, Vergil sacrifices Dante, realizing somewhere in his growing insanity that he’s just stepped over a line that he can’t go back on.
Well, all in all, I think it turned out pretty good. It’s one of the rarities as far as completed fanfictions go. My other one is a two-and-a-half page shorty (not DMC). This is also the first story I’ve ever uploaded anywhere (or, rather, I’m going to be uploading it). So, while I’m not a newbie to the fanfic world, I am a newbie to mass feedback on my stories from the internetfolk.
Please tell me what you think. I would love to hear it. ^_^
I hope you enjoyed “The Ghost of You”!
- Jen
Author’s Notes
As with any piece of writing, the author finds one’s self influenced by one’s environment and circumstance. Each nuance of life works itself into the style of the writing and creates a unique flair that always leaves some impact on the reader. There are those who will love a story, and there are those who will hate it.
“The Ghost of You” is a fanfiction that attempts to symbolize the nature of love – indiscriminate, and loyal. Of course, this story will likely disturb those not accustomed to this fandom, but for those who don’t bind their self-proclaimed morals about them so tightly, I hope to have pleased you.
This is, above all things, a tale about love overcoming all things. While this story doesn’t sport a happy ending, as most would expect for such a concept, the meaning stays true throughout. The brothers lash out at each other, but the underlying care they have for one another brings them together ultimately. Was this story ever meant to have a happy ending? No, not really. Although I hadn’t originally intended on writing the fourth chapter, I felt that it gave the work a more conclusive ending. While I don’t mind cliffhangers, I didn’t want to be asked to write more – more out of the temptation that I would rather than not wanting to accommodate to a fan’s request. So, I decided to go with a fourth chapter.
Well, now that you’ve seen the formal, serious thoughts on this fanfic, how about some point-by-point thoughts? I promise not to be so...proper...about it. ^_~
First and foremost, you should understand the title of the fanfic, since it isn’t alluded to anywhere in the story. The title comes from one of my original inspirations to write it – a song. No, this isn’t a songfic; I just tend to get my ideas from sources like that. The piece is called “The Ghost of You” by My Chemical Romance. Just a day or two prior to the first time I heard it, I had beaten Devil May Cry 3. As usual, my mind whirled at every song I heard, thinking up stories and music videos for that game. I had fallen in love with Vergil’s character, and the possibility of utilizing that persona somehow was beyond my resistance. As I listened to the song, the parts of my fanfic seemed to fall in place, though it would certainly be a sorrowful story. That was okay. Serious is my specialty. So, I went with it. Using “The Ghost of You” as a reference, I began writing. For your convenience, the lyrics are posted below.
My Chemical Romance - "The Ghost of You"
I never said I'd lie and wait forever
If I died we'd be together now
I can't always just forget her
But she could try
At the end of the world
Or the last thing I see
You are
Never coming home
Never coming home
Could I? Should I?
And all the things that you never ever told me
And all the smiles that are never ever
Ever...
Get the feeling that you're never
All alone and I remember now
At the top of my lungs in my arms she dies
She dies
At the end of the world
Or the last thing i see
You are
Never coming home
Never coming home
Could I? Should I?
And all the things that you never ever told me
And all the smiles that are ever gonna haunt me
Never coming home
Never coming home
Could I? Should I?
And all the wounds that are ever gonna scar me
For all the ghosts that are never gonna catch me
If I fall
If I fall (down)
At the end of the world
Or the last thing I see
You are
Never coming home
Never coming home
Never coming home
Never coming home
And all the things that you never ever told me
And all the smiles that are ever gonna haunt me
Never coming home
Never coming home
Could I? Should I?
And all the wounds that are ever gonna scar me
For all the ghosts that are never gonna...
I found that my accuracy in following the lyrics rose and fell as I wrote, but I felt as if the mood remained constant. The first chapter and the end of the second are probably the best examples of my most accurate moments.
Other songs that inspired me to a lesser extent along the way included:
3 Doors Down – “Behind Those Eyes”
A Perfect Circle – “3 Libras”
Cold – “Cure My Tragedy”
Disturbed – “Guarded”
Evanescence – “Missing”
Gary Jules – “Mad World”
Nine Inch Nails – “And All That Could Have Been”
- “Leaving Hope”
- “The Perfect Drug”
One Less Reason – “Favorite Color”
Savage Garden – “Gunning Down Romance”
Sevendust – “Skeleton Song”
SpineShank – “Forgotten”
Submersed – “Hollow”
Theory of a Deadman – “The Last Song”
Vanessa Carlton – “Twilight”
Hmm...that list turned out longer than I thought. Well, such is the way with creative inspiration. I’m not going to bother with the lyrics with all of those, because...you know why. It’d be waaaaaay too long.
Now that the main muddle is out of the way, I’d like to do a run through my story and pick up a few points for explanation or personal thoughts. I’ll start with technical details and move on to the creative points.
- chapter titles – I did my best to keep them simple, though my often long-windedness would argue with that. Mostly, I tried to capture the theme of the chapter in a word.
- those ominous intros at the beginning of each chapter – again, like the title, I wanted to set up the reader for what I was going to put them through. The one on the second chapter is my least favorite. It only really makes sense to me, I think.
- chapter length – okay, I know that the second chapter is ungodly long, but there’s a reason for that. Originally, that was what I wanted to write. My entire fanfic would have portrayed them as teens at first. Then, I decided to add other parts, because those ideas also interested me. Had it just been that chapter acting as the entire fanfic, you better believe that I would have had Dante and Vergil doing each other in that chapter, instead. ^_~
- style – I don’t use many simple sentences. You might have noticed that. The reason for that is because I like to ramble. Well, it’s not the only reason...it’s also because I like to use them for dramatic effect. If my entire story were littered with them, then they wouldn’t stand out when I wanted them to.
- no indenting, but spaces between paragraphs – I like the look of it. It’s cleaner, and it makes it easier to find a particular part again.
Creative Points
- out of character Dante – I’m so sorry for this. My brain thinks in scorning sarcasm, so Dante’s approach to humor is foreign to me. He acts like...well...a dumbass...and despite how I may love him for that, it’s just not something I’m good at writing. On my good days, I can do wry humor very well, so parts like the beginning of the memory section in Chapter 2 came out great. Then, as the story went on, Dante slowly became more and more angsty and angry. Considering the story, I guess it’s not impossible that he’d react that way, but I still feel like something was wrong.
- Angie and her parents – I really wanted to show Dante attempting to interact with people who are basically normal. God fearing people. Previously happy people. This just happens to be a bad break for them. As for Angie...I don’t know. I was a weird little kid, old beyond my years, so I was trying to portray a normal little girl in the way that I thought she might act.
- telepathic communion with the fire spirit – you have to imagine that Dante would have picked up some tricks like that along the way. Certainly, not every demon is out to kill him – at least, not before he learns something from them.
- sand and blood – depending on the demon, some bleed and some turn to sand when injured or killed. Just in case you didn’t know that, so you don’t think I’m schizophrenic with my descriptions.
- Dante runs after killing Angela – you never see him willingly attack a human in the games – I mean, Lady has to attack him countless times to aggravate him enough to do it. Thus, I imagine that he doesn’t sit very easy with taking a human life. Also, there’s no way he could have talked himself out of that situation. So, he ran.
- “twin link” – it was a passing thought that turned into a centerpoint of my plot. If Dante can sense demons and hear voices in his head, then he can hear Vergil, right? Again, it’s another interpretation on my part. Then again, aren’t most of these points...?
- back and forth banter between the twins – writing conversations between the boys was both the hardest and my favorite part. They don’t exactly finish each other’s sentences, but they have learned each other’s behavior so well that they always have some witty comeback for the banter.
- happy Eva – for Dante to come out with the kind of personality he has, his mom had to have been pretty supportive. I can’t say that I know much of anything about her character, so it’s just an interpretation.
- Carver High School – a name that I just randomly pulled out of my ass. No relation to anything.
- “Sparda” last name – oh, come on. That’s just cute. ;p
- Star Wars – the original trilogy is my favorite series of movies. I’m such a nerd.
- “licking the wounds” – to me, Vergil seems to embrace his demonic side more than Dante does. So, I figured that he’d be the first to “make a move,” so to speak, not even realizing that he was doing it. I was worried about how this part would turn out, and I’m still not sure that it feels right.
- intimacy – for much of chapter two, I depict the twins in a dreamy, romantic state. I don’t mean for it to come off as corny. More like...they’ve both found someone who can understand everything, so they bask in each other’s presence to indulge in that comforting feeling.
- rape – again, I believe that Vergil embraces his demon heritage more, so he’s more prone to violence than Dante.
- foreplay – I didn’t want to have the twins have sex in chapter two, because I had it planned for chapter three. Like I said, though, if this had been a one shot, they would have done it.
- Eva’s death – my story couldn’t have progressed without this scene, though I liked her sunny character. I needed to give the twins some motivation to go their separate ways, and this seemed like the best way. The scene felt drawn out to me, but pretty much everything in chapter two was as well, so...yeah. *shrug*
- swords and amulets – I’m positive that Eva would’ve had the amulets. Dante even says in the first game that they belonged to her – well, his did at least. As for the swords...Yamato had to have been somewhere where Vergil could have found it. I decided to make his mother its keeper. Rebellion...it made the transition easier to keep the swords together, so I did.
- argument in the police station – my thought was simply that Dante needed someone to lash out at. Remember, step one in a traumatic situation is denial. Step two is anger. Dante was obviously at two.
- “Jump. Leap. Fly.” – knowing that they were going to leave, what did it matter if the twins showed off their abilities? At this point, they had both made an unconscious decision to accept their lineage.
- crossroads – after Eva’s death, this term becomes very important in the fanfic. While it is used quite literally, it’s also symbolic of the separate paths Dante and Vergil are choosing to take.
- rain – essentially, a symbol for cleansing. As Dante looks for Vergil, he becomes less anguished and more hopeful. The dreary mood I set in the first chapter is lifted slowly.
- Mimicry – completely made up, right along with the demon classes. The more I described the monster, the more I realized it sounded like a Hell Vanguard. That was an accident. *sigh*
- Tony Redgrave – another shot in the dark. I know that the name is on the side of Dante’s guns, and judging from other fanfics and debates, I figure it’s safe to say that he knows our resident hunter. Of course, if other sources are to be believed, then Tony = Dante. I don’t know which to believe, so I went with Tony being a different person entirely.
- Untouchable, Holy Water, and Yellow Orb – all references from the first game, though the latter two appear in the third. After playing DMC on DMD! Mode, Untouchables become all too important...
- second meeting of the twins – I wasn’t sure how to start this, and Dante’s reactions might seem stiff. The whole exchange doesn’t really feel like a reunion, but given the circumstances, I suppose it makes a little sense, at least.
- Dante’s apartment – gah. I know nothing about guys’ apartments or rooms. So, I just tried to take basic imagery from his office and translate it into what his “crib” might look like.
- Tab – oh, yes, cancer-causing soda. And it tastes horrible to boot. I figured that when Dante wasn’t having a keg that he was probably having a Tab.
- Vergil’s hatred for humans – had to start somewhere, so I chose to put it in his childhood without Dante. The reason I gave was logical, but not very creative. I couldn’t think of anything better.
- “Laura” and “Urkel” – I was so hooked on those 80s/90s sitcoms when I was a kid. I don’t have the foggiest what made me think of Family Matters at that part, but it made me giggle every time I read over it.
- the sex scene – oh, yes. I knew it was going to happen, and I was steeling myself for when I’d finally write it. Believe it or not, that was my first one ever. I didn’t really know where to go at first, but I’ve read enough yaoifics to have some clue of what is pleasing to the reader – that being me, primarily. I hope I did well.
- the demons attack! – happy ending my ass. ;p
- Descent – it took me a while to come up with a good title for the chapter. I knew I wanted something to represent Vergil’s quest for power, and it occurred to me that he seems to get less and less rational (and patient) as the game goes on – or, at least after he meets Dante again. Thus, you get the “descent into insanity” theme.
- first person POV – why? As you probably noticed, this fanfic has been more the story of Vergil than it has been the story of Dante. As such, I really wanted to personalize this chapter to him. None of the text or actions within the scenes was altered from the original game (in fact, I spent quite a lot of time going back to the game and making sure I had it down word for word and action for action). I did add in a few untold scenes of my own, but I largely tried to keep it focused on Vergil’s inner self – on his slow descent into madness.
- “pros and cons” – heh. Heh. Heh. You have to imagine that Vergil has a sense of humor, no matter how dark, just from the way he interacts with Dante. Quite honestly, that’s probably my favorite section in Chapter 4
- Mary – not too much to say about this one, except that you have to admire her efforts in the game. Even though she’s gullible, she’s still one tough bitch, and I think Vergil would appreciate that.
- the final section – as the fanfic goes on, “sacrifice” becomes more and more important. Vergil sacrifices his sanity for power. Dante sacrifices his love for his morals. Finally, Vergil sacrifices Dante, realizing somewhere in his growing insanity that he’s just stepped over a line that he can’t go back on.
Well, all in all, I think it turned out pretty good. It’s one of the rarities as far as completed fanfictions go. My other one is a two-and-a-half page shorty (not DMC). This is also the first story I’ve ever uploaded anywhere (or, rather, I’m going to be uploading it). So, while I’m not a newbie to the fanfic world, I am a newbie to mass feedback on my stories from the internetfolk.
Please tell me what you think. I would love to hear it. ^_^
I hope you enjoyed “The Ghost of You”!
- Jen