Ninja Gaiden Koibito

Eliot Expansion Pack: Hitomi

The storm had come out of nowhere.

Eliot’s small raft had been tossed like a toy from one mountainous wave to the next, battering the boy badly. In desperation he had strapped a rope around his waist and tied himself down against the planks of wood, tying the knots by feel between the flashes of lightning.

The sky turned a brilliant purple for a split second as a thunderbolt slashed through the clouds. It was in that moment that Eliot’s keen eyes, tired as they were, caught glimpse of palm trees being thrashed by the merciless winds.

“I’ve found it!” Eliot cried aloud and reached for his humble backpack. “I’ve done it!”

As soon as the words left his mouth, Eliot heard a horrible roaring from behind him. Craning his neck around, the boy gasped in horror. A titanic tsunami towered over him, seemingly miles high. Before he could scream, the wall of water crashed down toward him.


* * *


When Eliot came to himself, he was overcome with a potent sense of dislocation. His eyes burned from the glare of a gorgeous tropical sun as he gazed up at the sky. Eliot sat up slowly, every muscle groaning in protest. Looking around, Eliot quickly realized he was in the middle of a jungle.

“But how?” Eliot whispered out loud. His last memory was the terrifying mountain of water plunging toward him. Then he remembered the island he had glimpsed just before, and it came to him. The tsunami had carried him far past the beach and deposited him in the interior of the island. But how far from the beach, he did not know.

There was only one way to find out. Eliot struggled to his feet, and just as quickly fell back to the soft foliage beneath him. Eliot did not know exactly how long he had been laying there unconscious but judging by the weakness in his legs and arms, not to mention the way his head was swimming, he had been out for several days at least. Several days without food, but far worse; several days without water. Worst of all his backpack, and the fresh water and food within it, were nowhere to be found.

As Eliot lay there, trying to decide what to do, his sharp ears discerned a very welcome tinkling: water, and not far at all. Eliot managed to crawl his way through the bush, fighting against his nausea and the looming darkness behind his eyelids. He reached a small spring and carefully sipped water, not wanting to overdo it. Soon he felt strong enough to stay on his feet, and after several hours of slow going, he found a coconut tree. By nightfall Eliot had quelled his hunger, and fell into a deep sleep.

For the next week, Eliot regained his strength. At last he felt that the time had come to continue his quest to find Ryu Hayabusa as his master Gen Fu wanted. Eliot picked a westerly direction and set off.


* * *


When he met her, everything happened so very fast.

The sun had set, and the sky glittered with the light of a million stars. The jungle grew thicker, and Eliot had just decided to call it a day and was looking for a good place to lay down for the night when there was a sudden commotion in the bush behind him. A fist shot out at him, and Eliot’s martial arts training took over.

The young boy parried the strike, sending his open palm back toward his attacker. His strike met the rushing fist with a thundering impact. Eliot staggered back, shocked at his own strength and that of his attacker. A vague silhouette rushed toward him out of the jungle, arms striking at him in a furious attack. Eliot gave himself over to Gen Fu’s training. His leg swept out, knocking the shadowy figure off its feet. Before he could capitalize on his advantage, Eliot was forced back by a savage kick to his stomach, knocking the air from him. The figure was back on its feet and pressing the attack once again with daunting aggressiveness.

After a furious volley of strikes, Eliot’s foot caught on a small outcropping of rock. The fleeting moment of unbalance was all his attacker needed. One moment he was standing, fending off attacks, the next he was staring up at the most beautiful face he had ever seen.

“Oh, danken Gott! You’re alright!” The angel’s voice was as beautiful as her brown hair and crystal clear blue eyes. “Can you sit up?”

Eliot nodded and sat up in what he suddenly realized was a bed. He was no longer in the starlit jungle, but was now in what appeared to be a very luxurious medical cabin. Eliot’s startled expression brought a smile to the angel’s face.

“You’re going to be fine.” Her eyes sparkled as she stood next to his bed wearing a deep crimson robe. “What’s your name?”

“Eliot.” His voice broke, and he blushed severely.

“Well, Eliot, I’m very happy to meet you. I’m Hitomi.” She extended her hand cheerfully. Eliot prayed that his palm was not sweating and shook as firmly as he could.

“Yes, Hitomi usually knocks all her favorite people out cold.” A beautiful woman walked in through the door, her ebony features full of warmth. She was followed by a shy looking Chinese girl. They both wore the same crimson robe as Hitomi.

“Thanks, Lisa.” Hitomi sighed. “I’m sorry, Eliot. We had an attack a few weeks ago by a very nasty clone, and I guess I was still a little jumpy.”

“You knocked me out?” Eliot’s eyes widened. “That was amazing fighting!”

“I would caution against expanding my dear friend’s ego, Eliot.” The slender Chinese girl smirked minutely.

“With friends like you, Leifang…” Hitomi grinned in spite of herself.

“Oh! Ahhhh!”

Eliot nearly jumped out of the bed in surprise as a woman’s voice cried out suddenly. He looked to his left and saw a golden-haired woman in the next bed, writhing under the covers and moaning. For a moment Eliot thought she was in indescribable agony, and then she continued.

“Yes! Oh, god, YES! That’s the way I want it! Just like that! Shove your big, thick meat into me! AHHH!!!” The woman moaned long and loud.

Eliot turned a deep shade of scarlet and averted his gaze.

“Don’t mind her, Eliot.” Lisa smothered a laugh behind her hand. “Tina is quite all right. I better wake her up.”

Lisa moved to Tina’s bedside and grabbed Tina’s arm, shaking gently.

“Oh, harder! Harder!” Tina continued. “Pound me, just keep pounding me! Oh yes! RYU!”

“Ryu?” Eliot gasped, all self awareness vanishing in an instant. “Ryu Hayabusa?”

“Yeah.” Hitomi nodded. “Ryu was in the bed you're laying in right now just yesterday.”

“Where is he?” Eliot asked eagerly.

“Oh, Lisa, why did you have to do that?” Tina complained groggily. “I was just getting to my favorite part.”

“Well, you’re just going to have to settle for what you get on the wrestling circuit.” Lisa winked at her. “We need to get a move on.”

“I guess your right.” Tina smiled up at her. “I guess I won’t be too lonely, will I?”

“Not if I can help it.” Lisa grinned.

The strange twinkle in their eyes was lost on Eliot, who was growing impatient to have someone answer his question. “Where is Ryu Hayabusa?”

“He left last night.” An odd shadow fell across Hitomi’s face. “Ayane, Kasumi and Ryu all left last night. No telling where they are now.”

Eliot fell back onto the bed, awash with a sudden tiredness. “I have to find him. It is a test from my master.”

“Well, that can wait till you’re back on your feet.” Hitomi chirped. “With Leifang’s herbal medicines, that shouldn’t be long at all!”

“Well, we’ll leave him in your capable hands.” Tina swung out from under her covers completely nude. Eliot felt his stomach do a dozen flips as her enormous and beautiful breasts jiggled as she jumped spryly to her feet. No one in the room seemed to give a thought to her nudity except Eliot, and he hoped no one would notice the sudden bulge in his bed sheets. Lisa handed Tina another of the crimson robes, and Tina looked at it with a baffled expression. She then glanced over at Eliot, and realization dawned in her face. She quickly wrapped herself in the soft robe. “Oh, yeah, thanks. Well, we should get going.”

“Nice meeting you, Eliot.” Lisa nodded to him. “Good luck with your mission.”

“Thank you.” Eliot smiled back, glad that his excitement had finally begun to pass.

The two women left and Leifang soon went to prepare some food and medicine for Eliot. Hitomi stayed, sitting in a chair next to Eliot’s bed, chatting energetically. She seemed very interested in Eliot’s training under Gen Fu, and wanted to hear all he had to say about his master’s teachings. Each day she came in to visit with him, listening to him and telling him of her own Karate instructor.

“As soon as you’re on your feet, we’re going to spar a little before you go.” Hitomi declared.

It never crossed Eliot’s mind to argue.


* * *


“Well, Eliot, let’s see what you’ve got!” Hitomi assumed a fighting stance, clad in her white sparing outfit.

Hitomi had searched the jungle and had miraculously managed to find Eliot’s backpack hanging in a tree. He now wore his white and blue combat robe, replete with the ancient symbols of Gen Fu’s dojo.

“Alright, Hitomi.” Eliot smiled back at her, setting his feet. “Here I come!”

Eliot shot across the sandy beach, closing in on Hitomi in less than a second. He kicked and punched in a highly disciplined routine, high then low. Hitomi blocked each of his strikes with practiced grace, grinning with glee as they battled along the length of the beach. They sparred for hours, heedless of the time, taking breaks ever so often to discuss technique. The sun had just begun to touch the glistening horizon when Hitomi landed the strike that would change Eliot’s life forever.

Eliot fell onto his back, the soft sand breaking his fall. Hitomi, giggling, knelt over him on her knees, her hands pinning his shoulders down. Eliot laughed aloud in spite of the ache in his ribs from Hitomi’s powerful kick. Hitomi, panting and exhausted, sat back. Her toned butt came to a rest on Eliot’s groin.

Eliot felt panic and excitement battle through his body. Excitement won, and his body responded. Hitomi’s breath caught in her throat as she felt Eliot’s untested manhood rise up against the crotch of her sparring uniform. For a long time they just stared at each other, too nervous to say or do anything.

Then Hitomi’s hips began a slow, almost imperceptible movement. While he could hardly see it, Eliot certainly felt Hitomi’s clothed crotch grinding over his now rock solid erection.

“H-Hitomi…what are you…” Eliot’s voice was weak with the most amazing mixture of terror and euphoria. He trailed off, afraid that perhaps Hitomi did not realize what she was doing, and if he brought it to her attention, she might stop.

“Do you like me?” Hitomi asked softly. Her hips slowly increased their undulations against him.

“Yes…Yes, I like you, Hitomi.” Eliot squeaked.

“I like you too, Eliot.” Hitomi’s eyes were large as moons and deep as the night sky. “Do you want to...” She trailed off.

“I…well, I…” Eliot knew his face must be as bright red as the setting sun to the west. “I…haven’t….”

Hitomi placed a finger on his lips. Eliot felt an electrical charge jump between his lips and her fingertip and he closed his eyes. “It’s not too hard. I’ll help you.”

When Hitomi’s full, lush lips descended on his mouth, Eliot felt the earth drop out from beneath him, sending him falling through the stars. When she broke off the kiss, Eliot opened his eyes to see Hitomi smiling warmly down at him. Hitomi reached up and slipped her sparring uniform from her shoulders and let it fall away. Eliot gazed at her naked torso. Her pert breasts stood proudly on her chest, and beneath was her perfectly toned abdomen. It took Eliot a second, but his hands quickly followed his desire and reached out and grasped the full and wonderfully warm orbs of Hitomi’s bosom.

“Oh, Eliot.” Hitomi closed her eyes. “Squeeze them. Please.”

Eliot’s hands kneaded her firm flesh, eliciting a low moan from Hitomi. Eliot marveled at the feel of her. He wondered what she would feel like pressed against his bare chest. His hands left her chest long enough to pull his blue uniform up over his head and toss it away. Hitomi lay down on top of him, letting her breasts press fast against Eliot’s toned chest.

“Hitomi, can I kiss you?” Eliot whispered.

“Of course you can.” Hitomi giggled. “We’ll be doing a lot more than kissing.”

Eliot pressed his lips against hers once again, and this time Hitomi’s sweet tongue slipped into his mouth to play with his own. While their tongues dueled, their hands worked to shed the remaining barriers between them. In moments they lay naked on the sand, Eliot running his hands through Hitomi’s amazingly soft hair. Hitomi’s slender hand snaked down his lean body and found his stiff cock pulsing in anticipation.

“Oh, god, Hitomi!” Eliot gasped as her fingers wrapped around him. “I’ve…never had a girl touch me like that.”

“Like what?” Hitomi grinned. “Like this?”

Hitomi began pumping his rod with her hand, jerking the hard member as fast as she could. She watched as Eliot melted under her, his eyes going wide as a shocked cry ripped from his lungs.

“Ahhh! Oh, YES! That’s…oh, Hitomi…yes…” Eliot pulled Hitomi’s head back down into another fierce kiss while his other hand ran down her smooth back to grasp her tight butt, his fingers squeezing the toned flesh.

Hitomi broke the kiss, and pressed her forehead against Eliot’s, staring into his eyes. “I’m going to put you inside me now. It’s going to feel…well…just hold on.”

Hitomi shifted and suddenly Eliot’s world expanded into a whole new dimension. His cock was bathed in a universe of unbelievable warmth that was so…

“Tight!” Eliot moaned. “Hitomi! You’re so…TIGHT!”

“Oh…Eliot…” Hitomi purred. “I can feel you. Inside me, I can feel you. And you feel so…so warm…” She leaned back, sitting up and bending Eliot’s cock with her. “So hard!”

“Ahhh! Please Hitomi…more…I want…” Eliot could hardly articulate what he wanted, but his hips were way ahead of him. He bucked up into the German girl, forcing his shaft deeper into that wonderfully warm and moist heaven of hers.

“Yes, Eliot!” Hitomi let loose, riding him vigorously, setting her breasts bouncing in front of Eliot. They were too tempting not to grope, and Eliot’s willpower was nowhere to be found. “Oh, that feels so good!”

“Hitomi…GOD!...YES!” Eliot’s eyes rolled back and he basked in the sensations. Hitomi’s tight vessel slid over his rod again and again, each time sending unparalleled pleasure coursing through his loins. He had pleasured himself before, but that could never have held a candle to Hitomi’s lithe body undulating atop his raging cock. “Hitomi, you’re…oh…Nngh! Ahhhh!”

“Oh, Eliot!” Hitomi expressed her affection by pulling him up into a passionate kiss as she ground her hips into him. She wrapped her lean legs around behind Eliot’s back, and he slipped his arms around her ribcage in an intimate embrace. The two young lovers sat in one another’s arms, gazing into each other’s eyes as their loins danced with pleasure.

“Hitomi…oh…I’m going to come…I…ahhh…I think….” Eliot gasped as he felt the thrill in his groin grow in power.

“I’ll come with you.” Hitomi gave him a sweaty smile. “Reach down and rub me.”

Eliot slipped his right hand from behind her back and sent it down toward where their bodies became one. He found a small nub next to where his shaft was plunging into Hitomi’s moist folds. He began stroking it with his fingers. “Like…like this?”

Eliot was answered with a squeal of pure ecstasy. “OH YES!!! Yes, Eliot! Right there! Rub me…right THERE!”

“Hitomi, I have to get…I can’t be inside you when I come!” Eliot had to shout over Hitomi’s wild moaning.

“No, no! AHHHH!!!! It’s alright! Come inside me!” Hitomi licked Eliot’s left ear all while her hips rolled against him. Eliot thrust up into her as hard as he could, not wanting to argue with a girl who was giving him such pleasure.

“Hitomi, I’m coming!” Eliot felt his body beginning to burn with a wondrous fire.

“Me too, Eliot, me too!” Hitomi sent her right hand down to join Eliot’s as he stroked her clit zealously. “Look me in the eye when we come, Eliot! Trust me!”

“OHHH!…Ok…Ahhh…I….OH, GOD!” Eliot’s groin exploded in a firestorm of ecstasy. He looked up and locked gazes with Hitomi, seeing her own orgasm ignite in her eyes as her womb clamped down on Eliot’s cock, pulling on the hard organ as it poured out the boy’s seed.

“Eliot! YES!!!” Hitomi shook in his arms. “I can feel you coming inside me!”

“Hitomi, AHHHHH!!!” Eliot fought to stay conscious as his loins continued to pulse again and again in perfect sync with Hitomi’s slick vessel.

Just as he thought he could take no more, their climax at last abated.

“I…I…” Eliot stammered; sweat pouring down his lean body.

“Not bad for a first time.” Hitomi grinned. “Now let’s see how the next round goes.”

“I thought I was going to leave.” Eliot felt conflicting emotions rise within him.

“Tomorrow, sure.” Hitomi nodded.

“But you just said…” Eliot stopped short as Hitomi’s hand began stroking his shaft back to attention.

“I know what I said.” Hitomi licked her lips. “And the next round happens right here, right now. Have you ever seen two dogs in heat?”

“Y-yes.” Eliot nodded.

“Good. Then I won’t have to explain this one.” Hitomi slipped away from him, turned and presented her taut butt to him. “Trust me, this is awesome.”

Eliot scrambled behind her, and carefully placed his shaft at her glistening entrance. He plunged into her, almost wincing as his groin slapped loudly against her toned butt. At first he thought he would feel shame taking her form behind, but in moments Eliot forgot all about honor and dignity and was lustfully pounding his slender hips into Hitomi with crazed fervor.

“Oh, yeah, Eliot!” Hitomi cooed. “That’s just how it’s done! You feel so good inside me!”

“I…I…” Eliot fought past his inhibitions. “You are so beautiful, Hitomi! I want to…I want to…”

“Screw my brains out?” Hitomi giggled as she began to hump back in time with Eliot’s thrusts.

“Yes!” Eliot cried out. He grasped Hitomi’s hips in his hands and slammed into her with abandon, letting his lust overpower him. “I want you, Hitomi! I want to have you! I want to have all of you!”

“Take me, Eliot!” Hitomi squealed in delight. “Take me as hard as you can!”

Boy and girl mated savagely on the beach, howling and screaming their pleasure to one another. Somehow the sex was even sweeter this time, as though their bodies were now properly acquainted.

“Hitomi, I’m going to come again!” Eliot gasped while he thrust away.

Hitomi slipped off of him and turned over onto her back, spreading her legs wide and beckoning him. Eliot crawled atop her, his shaft sliding back into her womb’s warm embrace. Hitomi wrapped her legs around Eliot’s thrusting butt, pulling him deeper with every stroke of his rod.

“I’m coming too, Eliot! Come with me!” Hitomi’s inner muscles once more constricted around Eliot’s throbbing cock, sending him over the edge as well. “Mein gott!!!”

“Hitomi, YES! AHHHHH!!!” Eliot poured himself into her for the second time, feeling his seed being pumped from him by every pulse of her warm canal.

Eliot collapsed on top of Hitomi, and they lay there for some time gasping for breath. When he could work up the courage, Eliot whispered in her ear.

“I think I might…” Eliot paused. “No. I love you, Hitomi. I know it.”

“Ich liebe Dich auch.” Hitomi whispered back.

“Hitomi, if I…well…if you…” Eliot did not know how to word it.

“I won’t, Eliot.” Hitomi giggled. “Leifang has been making me a very special tea the past few weeks. There’s no chance of it.”

“Oh,” It was all Eliot could think to say.

“But you have a quest, Eliot.” Hitomi chided.

“I also have the most beautiful girl in the world lying naked beneath me.” Eliot’s hands roamed down Hitomi’s irresistibly cute body. “You do the math.”

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Writer Commentary


In the previous commentary I asked for your opinions on whether the Eliot chapters should be part of Koibito or be their own separate story. Small Ninja was the sole responder, and I rewarded his participation by completely ignoring his suggestion. Man, I’m a jerk! It really came down to making sure the entire narrative is self-contained; I didn’t want to ask a new reader to go back and read another story before delving into Eliot’s tale.

The “Eliot Expansion Pack” is named, of course, after a once-common practice in games. A developer would release an expansion pack for a pre-existing game; new content that required the original game. This seemed to fit perfectly with what the Eliot chapters were, so it was named thus.

Changing main characters was a pretty big deal from a writing perspective. I had gotten really used to Ryu, or my version of him at least. Eliot views events and behaves differently than Ryu, and it was a real challenge to differentiate them.

We dive right into Eliot’s tale of his quest to find Ryu. Getting Eliot onto the island took a little longer than I had anticipated mostly due to my own lack of planning. I wanted Eliot to be washed onto the island by the same storm that had damaged Lisa’s boat, which led to Tina and Ryu’s prolonged tryst. Unfortunately the chronology of the storm and Lisa’s subsequent retrieval of the love-birds would have placed Eliot onto the island about a week before Ryu learned of Kasumi’s pregnancy. So why didn’t Eliot meet Ryu during this time? This required some “Castaway” filler, which leads to Eliot meeting Hitomi.

Given Alpha-152’s attack on Ryu, the girls are still fairly wary while venturing into the island’s interior. Eliot and Hitomi meet in the classic “boy meets girl, girl knocks boy out cold” cliché we all know and love. Eliot wakes up in the same bed that Ryu occupied earlier. Tina is apparently still not quite fully recovered from the intensity of her sex marathon with Ryu, and Eliot learns that his quarry is not to be found on the island.

Eliot and Hitomi’s relationship is pretty generalized and glossed over. But then again, I’m not writing a soap-opera (I hope), and the faster we get to the hot sex, the better. Boy and girl start a sparring match that quickly leads to an awkward situation. By the time we met Ryu, he was already a master of the carnal arts, but for Eliot, this is a first.

Writing sex scenes is very similar to writing a fight scene in that they have some very common elements. The basic variables in a fight are 1) who’s fighting 2) how they fight 3) where they fight. The same goes for a sex scene. Body types are very important, since they give the reader a visual basis. If this scene were between Ryu and Hitomi, it would be very different than with Eliot. Ryu is older and physically more developed, therefore Eliot’s younger physique and inexperience become defining traits to the scene. Eliot and Hitomi are both very young, so the emotional and physical style of their love making is very different than if Ryu and Hitomi were going at it again. Hitomi takes charge of the encounter with Eliot. Eliot speaks out more, as he is nervous and in awe of the experience.

Eliot comes inside of Hitomi, following her explicit instructions which probably gives the reader a shock. I realized while writing this chapter that it trivialize Ryu’s skill if the young Eliot could internalize his orgasm as well, but I also didn’t want have Eliot pulling out or ejaculating on Hitomi. The herbal tea is later explained to be an ideal contraceptive, which magically inhibits conception. Why would the girls have been drinking this tea in light of Ryu’s internalized orgasm? Perhaps some of them didn’t want to take the risk that maybe, at some point, he might slip up. Or maybe the tea just tastes really good.

One round just isn’t enough for Hitomi, so they go at it again with Eliot coming from behind. Eliot’s profession of love might seem a bit hasty, but these are two very young people, and the pairing seems very Romeo and Juliet…ish. Their feelings are genuine, even if they are quick to form.