Tender submission

so, i was really hoping for atleast some feedback, ive kinda lost my intrest in posting up the chapters for the story that goes to this. if anyone at all would like me to post it though that would be great, for those of you actually taking the time to read this heres a bit of the first chapter.

Lost In Translation

"Storm Wind is under attack!" yelled a acolyte of the grand majestic kingdom of Storm Wind. "Protect the king" shouted several guards as they ran toward Storm Wind Keep. A stealthy rogue gave a quiet laugh from his hiding spot in the canals of the large city; he had snuck his entire company in without anyone noticing, and had sent a few brave souls to their death as a distraction. Turning to the remaining members in his faithful guild he removed his mask to reveal his face. Dark ebony dyed locks lay to the side of his face; his emerald green eyes were hard and determined, he addressed his guild without fear as everyone in Storm Wind was busy and in a state of panic. "Everyone knows the objective, stick to it, if someone falls, pay them no mind, they shall rise again." The majority of the guild were blood elves as he himself was, he nodded before turning to swim to the dock of the canal. Summoning forth his Swift Black Hawk Strider, he dashed off his guild close behind into the Dwarven district of Storm Wind.

A old female gnome yawned from her place near the fire of her sitting room; she hopped off the large winged chair and walked to the cat that lay in front of the fire resting his eyes. She bent down to pet the creature, her long black bangs hanging in front of her eyes. The cat flicked his ear and turned on its back to playfully claw at the bangs dangling before him. The old gnome smiled rubbing at the creatures belly, she spoke gently to him. "Bed time Roku, tomorrow Mehlar Dawnblade is coming for a visit, so you get to go out to play in the forest." The dark blue cat purred, pleased with the news. A crash was heard from just outside of the gnome’s sitting room, the cat leapt to his feet growling.

The gnome cautiously rose to her feet, a frantic scream was heard as a female human burst into the room. "Lady Shadia! The horde, they‘re coming, they’re ins-" The servant girl fell to the floor suddenly. Shadia quickly ran to her aid, only to find the poor girl had died from fear. Shadia cursed under her breath, screams of torment echoed through out the halls of her mansion. Turning to Roku she slipped a soul stone around his neck, it dangled like the golden coin hanging from his neck. "Should you die Roku stay dead until it is safe to return." The druid cat nodded, stepping back he faded hiding in the shadows. The old gnome slipped from the room, running quickly to her chambers, Roku followed slowly behind Shadia.

"I saw the wench, this way, for the horde!" Shouted the rogue with ebony hair, he sprinted down the hall after the old gnome; Coming to an abrupt stop at the locked door, he searched his inventory for his thief’s tools.

Shadia quickly dug through her chest finding her armour, the door wouldn’t hold back the horde for long, she slid on the few final pieces before summoning her felguard.

The guild stood behind their leader as he worked on opening the door, with the final bit of fiddling, he turned to smirk triumphantly at his guild, he kicked open the door falling into stealth before the door swung open.

Shadia gasped, she hadn’t been expecting so many, at least 40 horde stood before her ready to kill, she gulped knowing death was imminent, she smirked, didn’t mean she was going down without taking a few of them with her. Before any of them could react, she had sent her felguard after the group of healers in the centre of the group. She sent a chaos bolt at a undead priest with the lowest health. The felguard was quickly downed and the guild leader put an end to Shadia’s refusal to go down by sapping her, he came out of stealth and laughed at her, he turned to the guild mocking the immobile gnome. "The high chief translator thinks she can take us all on? What ya say fellas? highest roll gets the killing blow." The crowd cheered all tossing the dice hoping to win.

Through the haze Shadia grit her teeth, what gall, to be rolling on her death. She watched as the guild master laughed again before a bolt of green light hit him square in the back.
The blood elf turned with a scandalized look on his face to the druid who stood defiantly beside her. The hunters threw they’re marks on the druid and began to shoot before the guild master stopped them.
"Lord Ryota?" the tauren hunter stepped forward questioning the rogue’s actions. Ryota looked at the druid with intrigue, the look of fire in his starlight eyes drew the rogue in. "Who ever won the roll is free to kill her, leave the druid to me." Ryota’s second in command, Jinari stepped forward, his undead form was glowing with purple demonic shadow energy. "You won sir." he said as another rogue stepped forward to sap Shadia again before she woke from her disorientation.

Roku conjured another forest wrath spell hurdling it at the rogue, not fearing death what so ever, "gar ogg jin atek." said the rogue still staring at Roku, not worried in the least as his faithful guild healed the wounds.

Two blood knights got into an argument as they both re-rolled the same highest number, Ryota turned and rolled his eyes, "Just kill her already." he fell into stealth again and shadow stepped over to the druid who was in the middle of casting a healing spell on Shadia.

The druid fell victim to the same ability as Shadia, tears streaked down the druid’s unfocused eyes as he heard his master breathe her last breath. " Well, what have we here? A night elf with balls, that’s cute, children of the night are known cowards, hiding in the shadows, and behind your pets. You stand before the mighty horde and yet you do not cower? I see it even now in those starlit eyes of yours, you stare death in the face yet you’d attack me if you were able." Ryota spoke to the night elf walking circles around him.