ch11. I did not enjoy the Gordon romance stuff nor the `working girl' intro. But the fisting was very hot. Hope to read more of that.
Chap10, wow that was awesome. I'm a little annoyed Angelica gave into Lara's backlash at the end, I certainly want Lara to be with more animals, but I'm sure Angelica has a plan. Relaxing the cervix was a nice touch. Looking forward to more fisting and animals. Great job!
Chap9 was not great, though I realize you are working on slowly breaking down Lara's will. Hopefully Gordon won't `rescue' her, I'd rather see him gone so Lara has no one but Angelica in her life. Looking forward to some serious will-breaking sex next time. Hopefully with fisting or animals.
Chap7, sexy stuff. Hopefully Lara is close to breaking. I want to see her with Angelica's horse!
Enjoyed chap6. I hope Lara has to take on the sorority mascots next and eventually Angelica's horses. Ultimately Lara should realize she is most happy as Angelica's pet.
I enjoyed Chapter Six. Maybe short but fun. At first I was worried because everything was supposed to be just oral, but when a student from The Pledges came on the scene, and Lara wanted to show how good her pussy is, everything turned into great fun. When you use students we already know and they interact with Lara, once they fuck her like a slave and have no idea that she is the real Lara Croft, and then Lara, as a professor, sexually teases them through lectures, it's fun.
Keep Tom, Martin and others in the game, it's fun to watch their behavior at university, their desire for Lara at lectures and then their fantasy through sex in anonymity.
The scene with the pink fat pig and glory-hole was really good.
I would definitely like more of their perverse chats about Lara and their sexual experiences near Lara as a professor in the hallways or classrooms. I think you could take the whole thing to the next level, namely sex with a mask or sex where students have a blind eye mask. They can just feel her body but can't see him or Lara has a mask, so they can see her body but not her face.
It depends on which direction you want to go and what you like. I like the direction of chapters 5 and 6.
Chap5, not really my thing. I hope Lara is not getting out of this but I have a feeling she is getting set up for real domination. I want to see her as a pet getting it from Angelica's dog or horse. Hoping for more fisting and domination!
Chap4 very hot! I loved all the fisting. Hope for more of that and Lara owes Mary a good licking out. Hopefully Mary will get to break in Lara's ass at some point.
Chapter 3 I found more fun than Chapter 2.
I can't help myself but I can't find Lara Croft here as her character, but as a crazy naive high school girl. I miss her authority here, bad ass character. It's like ying and yang. When her bad ass character doesn't work, there's no excitement about her humiliation. Just my opinion of course. Lara Croft fans have different visions about her.
The beginning with a swimsuit is good, you managed to build an erotic atmosphere with humiliation. It would be fun if the calendar with Lara was mentioned somewhere later in the story. On the other hand maybe just if you write at the beginning that Lara wears four swimsuit models, you steal to the reader surprise because he immediately expects four models and it can be a monotonous reading. I think it is very important to build up expectations and surprises here. Yes of course, there were four types of swimsuit, but we expected from the beginning that if the first are decent, the fourth will be lewd. Maybe it would be good to interrupt it with something we don't expect. But I think tha the good surprise was the return of Gordon Davis on the scene. I like to see Lara Croft with a man, on the contrary, I don't like when she has to listen and is blackmailed by stupid spoiled young girls. I don't see her as Lara Croft. And that's my problem with the story. Despite that the chapter closing part was fun.
Chap2, sexy stuff. Not the direction I was expecting the story to go but I enjoyed it. Hopefully the sorority has a large, canine mascot. Also would like to read plenty of fisting. Looking forward to next chap.