rate_review Reviews

Nice story. When is the next Update? 

Astounding descriptions, as always, and a great start to what I hope is an ongoing foray into the Overwatch world.

If I could offer one piece of constructive criticism, your sentence structures in this story relies heavily on the "as," for example: " A soft breathy sigh slid from Widowmaker’s cobalt-blue lips AS she sunk lower in her seat." As the chapter goes along, it becomes increasingly prevalent in the syntax of your prose. Once I noticed it, I had a hard time not noticing it. Not a cardinal sin, of course, just something I think you might want to watch out for in the future.

Good stuff!