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January 31, 2018 at 12:00 AM
The story is very well written. While I am not familiar with the game this story is inspired by, the story explains itself as it goes, at least somewhat. Having the group walk over half a mile into a cave is counterintuitive at first, but "group mentality'" can do this. Your character in Chapter 3 doesn't seem the type physically.
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January 27, 2018 at 12:00 AM
Wow. I have so many positive things to say about your protagonist! She's so unique and a refreshing change from the typical females we see on here. I love her masochistic and, at times, sociopathic personality. I love how she reacts to situations in a way that is so unlikely, yet you MAKE it work perfectly. She's super entertaining.
Is it weird that the skeleton is strangely attractive, by the way?