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person CrossC
schedule December 22, 2017 at 12:00 AM

I liked this a lot!

Some great details... you even included the squirrels!

Riou and pregnant Nanami was great.  That 'food for the baby' thought.  Nice.

 

Seriously, I dont know how you write sp fast at this level of quality.

In any event, I can't wait to see more of that orgy!

...cough....Riou....cough...

 

person CrossC
schedule December 20, 2017 at 12:00 AM

Another well crafted chapter.   

I appreciated Lorelai's comments about the knights' cocks being heavy and her favorite.  And Miklotov cumming early.

Also liked the image of Flik and Victor masturbating w/ Leona on the sidelines.  

The tentacles were a bit extreme even for me but it was still all good.

Can't wait to see what you've got planned!

schedule December 20, 2017 at 12:00 AM

Im loving this!

person CrossC
schedule December 19, 2017 at 12:00 AM

Well done.

I wasn't in to the violence but everything else was so hot, I didn't mind it.

 

You're descriptions are great.  You make it so easy to visualize the scene from the festive atmosphere with various onlookers having sex to the forms of your characters.  Oulan and Lorelai.  Wow.  Both of them muscular in their own way.  Hot.

 

I also love the way you write sex scenes that emphasize the size of the members, particularly Oulan's huge tool in comparison to Wakaba's petite body.  All those 'criss crossing' cum shots...

Bravo, looking forward to Lorelai's gangbang...

person CrossC
schedule December 19, 2017 at 12:00 AM

Oh!  I forgot to mention your use of the Double-Beat rune!  Loved that.  Bringing in the runes is awesome.   Suikoden's magic system has always been my favorite.

 

Heh.  It almost seems likes this is a world where Jeane's True Charm Rune has taken over...

 

schedule December 18, 2017 at 12:00 AM

Sweet  Thes chapters were great.

My fave was Leona going down on Rina.

Cant wait for next instalment!

person CrossC
schedule December 18, 2017 at 12:00 AM

Wow.  I'm really loving how quickly you are putting these out.  High quality, too!

A pretty interesting world here where even random women outside the New State Army are all about the sexes to the degree!

I really liked the casual scene with Kinnison drinking tea while Ayda does Shiro and then stepping up for sloppy seconds.

Definitely loved Riou's debut!  That was pretty much what I was hoping for.  I'm really looking forward to a chapter focused on him from start to finish.

 

 

 

schedule December 18, 2017 at 12:00 AM

What delightful vignettes!

Loved Oulan and that bit about Jeane!

She is my favorite character.  I love potential for erotic mind control that her charm rune represents.

Would love to see that in action.

 

My request would be for her to casually enter this war room discussion and ask Lord Riou or Ridley to drop their pants and bend over and she just take them with her big futa cock!  All the while her magic causes those watching to masturbate and then for everyone to go back to their meeting as if it were completely normal.

 

Would be absolutely adoring if you could magic up something like that!

 

Thank you so much for contributing!

 

 

person CrossC
schedule December 18, 2017 at 12:00 AM

Ah.  Yoshino was great.

 

Nice detail with that fudoshi.  Very hot image.

 

A nice cheating housewife, I love it.  Really enjoyed that thought at the end about Shu getting her pregnant before Freed.

 

Hmm.. methinks we need to see some of the more average endowed men getting some in the background if only to contrast with these well-hung studs starring the show.

 

Love it!  If you've got the will, keep'em coming!

schedule December 18, 2017 at 12:00 AM

Wowa!

Some crazy hot stuff here!