That was a really hot story and I can't wait to read more of your work if it is about the Pokemon girls. That is always a winner in my book.
I just wish we got to see more of Green's dream at the very start, like make it that she is having the dream and thinks its real until she wakes up. It also would have been hot to see what went on with Green's mother during all the time.
And the final part with Green getting pregnant from all three men...I don't think its very realistic, but I don't care it was still very hot. It would have been nice to see the guys fucking her while she was pregnant at the end.
Damn, that was hot. I want to read more.