Happy New Year 2019. The directions of the female characters are very enjoyable. Seems like Alista isn't so different from Olsar after all.
Well, we've definitely got some more information on Alista's plans here, and it is a better plan than I thought. Subtle, and easy enough to back out of up to a point if it doesn't look like it's going to work (up to a point). For what it's worth, I can't really see it working on Samus, especially now that Alista's given her quite a bit of information on how the tools work. Of course, that could easily be intentional on your part, and I entirely believe that Alista believes her plan will work, which is probably more important.
And perhaps that's enough to overcome my issues with her motivation. Certainly, the risk-reward ratio is looking considerably more favourable for her now. It's still not quite there for me, but I think that is more me than anything else.
Random little thing: I'm a little confused as to why Samus would be so surprised by the use of slavery, or even much of the methods. I assume this would have to be largely public knowledge, simply by the scale of the operation. It's the sort of thing I would imagine that a competent bounty hunter would know, either through research or simply her ship's computer bringing up information when she entered the system. Minor thing, though.
In short: well-delivered exposition that's interesting from a character and smutty perspective, while pushing the plot forward that little bit. I'm just a nitpicker.
Well, that certainly answers a few questions I had. Probably a more believable direction than I would have taken the story in, too.
I still don't quite buy Alista's motivation, though. Not for getting revenge on her brother and his underlings - that makes perfect sense. Rather, for trying to take control of Samus. Especially for her, having just seen what Samus can do even unarmed and outnumbered. It just seems too risky in the context. The same, of course, could be said for Olsar capturing Samus in the first place, but he at least had personal motivation to justify the risk. Alista doesn't seem to have any personal issue with Samus, so it just seems a lot of risk for little reward. Perhaps the motivation will make more sense when Alista's plan comes into full effect. And I'm sure it will be entertaining, anyway.
Regardless, this was still a good chapter that advances the plot nicely, while giving another example of Samus' treatment in captivity. It all paints a picture.
Also, Braca's a complete idiot if he can't figure out roughly what's going on, though that's probably the idea. Either that, or he's feigning ignorance to save his own hide.
Keep up the good work. I can't wait to see where this goes.
Another great chapter. Probably the best 'standard' smut in the story so far, with the right amount of detail to make it brisk but evocative. Of course, the aftermath was immensely satisfying as well. With that said, I hope we get more information on why the plan was timed in the way it was, because it seems to me that there would have been more straightforward ways from Alista's perspective. Minor issue, of course, and one that you may well explain in the next chapter anyway. Regardless, I imagine things aren't going to be entirely straightforward for Samus going forward.
Aww, I was hoping Samus would last a little longer than that, but let's see where it goes.
Long-time reader, first-time commenter here, just dropping a line to say that this is my favourite story on the site, and I'm so glad to see you continuing it. The scenarios in this story are imaginative and evocative, but you've also been able to make the characters interesting to read about. There's not much erotica where anyone would care about the plot, but this is one of those rare stories.
What I particularly like about this story, however, is the pacing. Each chapter and situation proceeds logically into the next, and each scene seems to find a way to degrade Samus further (this is in contrast to The Bergman Affair, which did feel a little like setpieces connected by a plot, rather than part of a single story). You've also been careful not to repeat yourself. Many less restrained writers would likely have had a fair few gang-bangs by now, but that would make things less interesting. It even makes sense in this story for the villains to be getting a bit overconfident, because of how thorough the breaking process has been, and by an almost compulsive need to humiliate Samus further.
In the interests of honesty, I would like to offer a few minor criticisms. First, I think Samus would be far more resistant to the physical torture that Sallis dishes out early on. If there's one Samus should be able to handle, it's pain. I think you could have justified Samus giving in to Sallis' demands as simply being rationalisation - it doesn't mean anything at the time, and it's only later, hearing her own voice, that it really begins to break her.
Second, I think your descriptions have been a bit sparse in the newer chapters. I would love to have seen more details for the stables. Are they medieval in nature, or more futuristic/alien? Little things like that could have made the situation even more vivid.
These are minor problems. I still love this story, and can't wait to see how it all plays out.
Solid updates from my long amissed degenerate brethren. This is definitely motivating me to rouse myself from post thanksgiving food-coma and put in some work. Good to see you back Hunter.
Glad to see you back in action! Good setup for a new phase of story here. If this were a crossover story I'd suggest FFX-2 "Rikku," who I've always felt looked like she was trying to say she was part-chocobo with that costume.
That's one way to put Samus back in touch with her avian roots. Getting a familiar vibe here with the hunt as some of the trials you put Lara through, but I wonder how the Hunter will take to it instead.
I'm writing this review just to say people into this kind of stuff really scare me. I'm with one of the previous reviewers, Samus would not be broken. The only reason something like this could happen to her is because she allows it, so I really hope for a happy ending. This woman has been through enough.
Pretty much just leaving this review to say I hope you're doing okay. I notice it's been two months since you were last on the forums.