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for Lara's enslavement

by HPharem

schedule February 18, 2018 at 12:00 AM

Write more.  Lara needs to be kept and knocked up.

schedule May 11, 2017 at 12:00 AM

Love this. Beast soon please? 

schedule May 11, 2017 at 12:00 AM

You need to proof-read, not just spell-check.  Simplistic, you need to spend more time on descriptions and take more time with each sex-act as they are the point of your story.  Try and make the dialog a little less `bad porn movie'.  Some potential but it needs a lot of work.