Hi do you do commissions?
I hope you will be writing more and end this one because it's soo good I can't wait. Keep up good work :).
Always love seeing a story where the ladies of Mass Effect are getting abused. Only critique I have is I feel there should be a new paragraph every time a different person speaks otherwise it gets kind of confusing trying to figure out who is talking
Decent set-up, though I like to know who I'm watching. I'm also afraid with all the `extra' targets needed for helping you will never get to the principles. Hope to read more and that the major girls will be targeted quickly. Hope to see Samara impregnated by her own daughter.
You've left yourself room to take this story in almost any direction. I'd love to see you get the minor characters first and have them used against the mains. Great start so far!