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Disturbing, but very hot, great vocabulary it does increases the imersion in the story, keep up te good work

Very well-written and descriptive. I especially loved the details about Cassie's torture! She is one of my least favorite characters so I must admit that I truly enjoyed reading this.

I read your original 'Crush' a while back and I enjoyed this as much! Keep up the good writing.

I came across this when I did the sweep and only now came back to read properly and review. I don't know the game, so I don't know the character, but I'm glad in a way because I didn't feel all that much for her which made this at least a little easier to read. I'm a big fan of horror: this has lots of it, and it seems like every paragraph goes further than the one before. I can't fault your descriptive work - you made me see everything vividly, giving the same detailed attention to the torture as the body odour at the beginning. Years ago, a magazine here published a short story by Chuck Palahniuk that they claimed was the most horrifically gory story in existence. They were wrong. This, in my mind, has well and truly taken the crown. I am left feeling violated, disturbed and sick. Kudos!

I did notice a couple of lines that had errors in.

Here: Cassie Cage’s self-congratulation has been premature. She felt as if a red mist came down when Splasher called her ‘missy’ againagain.
And here, an extra 's': You are s so fucking wet!”

Thank you for sharing this.