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August 30, 2015 at 12:00 AM
@Seje_for_days
You know...if you read these....
I'm gonna suggest trainer(M)Xstaraptor, or really any bird Pokémon, (F)
You can decide the setup if you want, you are good at writing after all.
Maybe they get lost or something. IDK, I'm just rambling now.
Keep up the good work!!
You know...if you read these....
I'm gonna suggest trainer(M)Xstaraptor, or really any bird Pokémon, (F)
You can decide the setup if you want, you are good at writing after all.
Maybe they get lost or something. IDK, I'm just rambling now.
Keep up the good work!!
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July 30, 2015 at 12:00 AM
"This tape will self-destruct in 24 hours"
Hmm, I wonder how long ago this chapter was writ-
Hmm, I wonder how long ago this chapter was writ-
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July 30, 2015 at 12:00 AM
"and promptly jazzed in her mouth"
I don't know why I found this typo so funny.
Probably mental images
(The reason that the date is the same is that I read both today because I missed when they were first released...)
I don't know why I found this typo so funny.
Probably mental images
(The reason that the date is the same is that I read both today because I missed when they were first released...)
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July 29, 2015 at 12:00 AM
I have two requests. One, A Female Gardevior recounts growing from a small ralts with her male trainer, and how she fell in love with him. This would be Oral, Vaginal, and First Time warnings. Two, A male Trainer with all female current Eeveelutions. Backstory is all were Eevees that were caught by male trainer in order to relocate them to safety. Over the years, they each came to love him, and evolve. Espeon, using Psychic powers ends up finding out that their trainer is a pokephilic, with feelings towards them that he won't give into, out of the fact that he cares about them too much. Story ends with Oral, Vaginal, Rimming, Anal, Face-Sitting(Eeveelutions on male), cock/ball worship
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July 11, 2015 at 12:00 AM
I've been enjoying this. Can't wait for more!
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June 5, 2015 at 12:00 AM
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June 5, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Man. You write pretty well, which is refreshing for this site, considering how low-quality a lot of the stories can be. Your method is also admirable, and gives you lots of flame to keep going. I hold one, rather large problem with it however. You can take my word for it or leave it.
Your 'lemon' breaks and such, interspersing of the narrative with comments such as 'pull those pants up!' and such. I know you're going for a humorous vibe, with a familiar wink to the reader... however, it's very bothersome to the eye. Not only does it break me out of the narrative, but it's also highly unprofessional and unnecessary. It's adultfanfiction.net, we all know what people came here for. The touches of humour aren't bad, but you need to work on your writing to develop a way to smoothly integrate it into the story. RIght now it reads as a well written story, but choppily paced. At the same time, the tone of the humor - the sudden flashes away from the smuttier scenes, the breaking of the narrative with a quip, the nature of the humor within the story- shows your green.
Overall, 3/5 stars. You're doing well so far, but there's always room to improve. Keep writing though. It's up to you to take my review as a proper review. But I feel if you did, you could create a story even ten times more worth reading.
Your 'lemon' breaks and such, interspersing of the narrative with comments such as 'pull those pants up!' and such. I know you're going for a humorous vibe, with a familiar wink to the reader... however, it's very bothersome to the eye. Not only does it break me out of the narrative, but it's also highly unprofessional and unnecessary. It's adultfanfiction.net, we all know what people came here for. The touches of humour aren't bad, but you need to work on your writing to develop a way to smoothly integrate it into the story. RIght now it reads as a well written story, but choppily paced. At the same time, the tone of the humor - the sudden flashes away from the smuttier scenes, the breaking of the narrative with a quip, the nature of the humor within the story- shows your green.
Overall, 3/5 stars. You're doing well so far, but there's always room to improve. Keep writing though. It's up to you to take my review as a proper review. But I feel if you did, you could create a story even ten times more worth reading.