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for Shokan Lust

by JayDee

person The Todd
schedule November 25, 2014 at 12:00 AM
It Was Great While It Lasted Five!
schedule November 23, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Sorry to heat it's ending, it has been a great ride. Very sexy, hope Sonya and Sheeva stay together.
person Anon
schedule October 13, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Loving it, will there ever some corporal punishment?
person Anon
schedule October 11, 2014 at 12:00 AM
good fic man keep going the doing sex is good
person The Todd
schedule October 11, 2014 at 12:00 AM
I'm Still Reading It And Enjoying It But I Don't Usually Feel The Need To Comment Every Single Chapter Five!
schedule October 9, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Enjoying the hotness. I like seeing Sonya pierced and tamed. Hoping for more fisting and domination.
person Anon
schedule October 8, 2014 at 12:00 AM
I like most of the story, very sexy. I don't like the rape scene here. It's not as blatantly manipulative and unnecessary as most stories' rape scenes are, but a wise writer once told me that, when writing stories, rape is the clumsy hammer that a better writer casts aside in favor of more subtle tools. "Save the girl from rape" is a tired, unimaginative, trite, and honestly very offensive cliche in fanfiction, being used as a crude way of emotionally uniting two characters (the victim/almost-victim and the rescuer) when the writer lacks the creativity and skill to forge and prove that emotional bond through real means. And the fact that it's used so casually, that this vile and horrible act that scars the psyche is a thoughtless go-to device for fic writers...it's really disturbing. It's disappointing to see it here, because you're good enough to do better.
schedule September 3, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Good to see chap5. A few word errors. Not my favorite chap, mostly just gory, but I enjoyed seeing Sonya getting dommed. Looking forward to kicking (hopefully that refers to penetration with a foot) though your comment after that leaves me puzzled.
Hoping for more soon.
schedule September 3, 2014 at 12:00 AM
I haven't read a story by JD that I haven't enjoyed. This is no exception. Hope theres more coming soon. Keep up the good work.
person Anon
schedule August 30, 2014 at 12:00 AM
If you don't release the next chapter soon, I'm going to rip your spine out of your ass and then whip you with it.