rate_review Reviews

while I think the reviewer above me is being way too harsh and critical, I do agree that the story was better when it was mainly Lara and the Wolves. And I personally like the B sections so I wish you kinda did the opposite and focused on that story and just removed it for others not interested in the pregnancy. But hey Im not picky.

I prefered this story when it was about Lara banging wolves instead of this faux-lesbian stuff. The instant Jennifer came in I sighed and said to myself 'they're going to be having sex pretty soon and the wolves are going to be forgotten.' Jennifer's quite boring, sorry.

A question: why split this story into chapters that just have a few sentences added rather than writing a seperate fic? I read these last two chapters and had to copy and paste both of them (as you seem to have done - sorry, that's just lazy.) into MSWord to tell the difference of... what, fifty words? Come on. If the fic's taking a 'different turn' at least have the decency to write completely new things happening in the alternate chapters. I promise you, no one is going to thoroughly read through these copy and pasted chapters eagerly looking for whatever couple of sentences you've added. If this wasn't your fic, would you do that?

Now. This isn't to say there isn't anything good about this fic. The first four chapters were pretty hot. And I like the idea of inter-species pregnancies. I just wish you'd come up with what you wanted to do with this story beforehand, instead of taking the easy way out and asking us. We're the readers. You're the writer. You're supposed to make these decisions and come up with the cool stuff. Have Lara explore and find a new species of wolf that wants to steal her from the others. Or have her meet those bandits again. You decide, not us. Don't be lazy.

This chapter is a repeat of the previous one.

"I just want the pack... thats all." Good doggies, giving her what she wants.
Lara Croft nursury ryme: A little red and ridding her good. Fap.(that means it's good by the way);d

Great work. Hope you do another TR story after this one.

This is almost exactly what I wanted. YES! It's a little short but I love it. One thing I'd like to add as a possible show for Lara. Letting her hair down. Literally. The pony tail is practical and sexy, But if she let her hair flow free I feel it would be the literal perfect embodiment of Lara fully giving over to Jen and the wolves.

While I'm not categorically against the idea of pregnancy with cross-species, I feel that the pregnancy shouldn't be used gratuitously, and at least in this context it doesn't seem to entertain me as much as the non-pregnancy chapter, which in my opinion was better written and flowed better with the rest of the story.

You could have Lara's hormones change from the constant animal sex to the point that she starts lactating, which the pups from other female wolves then start suckling at, which makes the pups suckling her bonded/loyal to her. Just a thought.

Hi! Got through the first three parts, I hope you didn't get too much stick over the plot-heavy part 2, there's nothing wrong with that stuff. It's a story, after all. Part 3 was pretty interesting, like the pack dynamics and the positions. And finishing with part 1, I think there were some parts that could have used a little more detail, but it was pretty good. Are you sure the only inspiration for it was animated gifs, 'cos it reminds me of something else I read sometime! Probably just coincidence :)

This is definately one of the more interesting TR stories I've really bothered reading, mainly because of this new chapter.
But both versions leave me with an interesting question. How are the wolves on this island still living? Plainly there are only males, no females. Unless they are immortal or something of that nature, it runs into an issue my brain is really breaking itself over.

Other then that issue though, this story is actually moving with a purpose, and that encourages me. No longer is it just smut without plot, you've given it some development now.

I'll be interested to see how the two paths roll from here on out, as I can say that both will likely hold a very interesting direction.

Read both branches. Not especially fond of this plot direction but glad to see you are including a pregnancy option. It should really be safe to have vaginal sex until the pregnancy is well advanced. Well written, hope for more soon.