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February 7, 2014 at 12:00 AM
I very much enjoyed this story! It's quite well written; though it might not matter to everyone, I always find excellent grammar and word choice give a story that extra oomph. As for the premise, I find it quite interesting. There's something quite exciting about a completely naive young woman being corrupted by the darkness in the universe.
As to the plot, it seems our little priestess is set on the path to become a PoW for the Horde... about as unlucky as you could be. I do hope that the story expands from there, though... theoretically, once you're unlucky enough to become a slave/PoW, how much less lucky can you get? I think the key is to have it be a gradual destruction of innocence.
That being said, I'm quite hopeful based on what has been shown so far and I'm sure you'll do yourself proud.
Kudos.
As to the plot, it seems our little priestess is set on the path to become a PoW for the Horde... about as unlucky as you could be. I do hope that the story expands from there, though... theoretically, once you're unlucky enough to become a slave/PoW, how much less lucky can you get? I think the key is to have it be a gradual destruction of innocence.
That being said, I'm quite hopeful based on what has been shown so far and I'm sure you'll do yourself proud.
Kudos.