rate_review Reviews

Either idea is great, as long as it doesn't have futa in it!

Excellent story, well written and thought out with an added advantage of being an underused game. I would say a hint of BDSM would be appreciated but since thats your intention anyway, I'll just say the more the better! I didn't notice any mistakes with your writing but feel free to email if you want something checking. Finally I recommend Lucca's idea, it seems a more natural progression than Marle taking the lead just yet.

Excellent story, well written and thought out with an added advantage of being an underused game. I would say a hint of BDSM would be appreciated but since thats your intention anyway, I'll just say the more the better! I didn't notice any mistakes with your writing but feel free to email if you want something checking. Finally I recommend Lucca's idea, it seems a more natural progression than Marle taking the lead just yet and futa is fine by me. EDIT: I didn't realise my email was hidden, it's muramas@live.co.uk

I would like to help you with editing, but I don't see an email address or anything like that in your profile.

I like where this is heading, and vote for One Night in Guardia. Since you ask for our thoughts, I hope there is as little futa as possible (none would be best), but it is your story.