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August 15, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Uh, yeah...Can we get an update to this?. I've been looking for a well-written story and I've found it, and the way you've written this up, I'm eager to see how you'll do Vergil
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April 25, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Moving along I can see that this is a great read so far. You have a quirky sense of writing style that's very detailed and thorough and it's been a delight.
Dante having his pizza taken away from him just makes me want to give him a big ol' hug. Aw don't worry Dante, perhaps this will give you some restraint! I like how Dante had the deal going on with the blood seal. I gotta be honest it's been done over in quite a few stories, but I have not seen many do it the way you do it, which is a good thing. I like how you built up the scene leading to his brother, going through his emotions of anger and betrayal. Nice going.
I can see that Maisha (cool, funky name btw) has some issues that are riding on her shoulders. At first I thought she was going to be this average little thing but she's an adult that has to make some adult choices. Btw, I THANK YOU for giving her a differnt background this time instead of being some high-school/college student. Ugh that gets tired and old. I could totally imagine the monster and what it looked like, even more sewwt was how Dante saved her in the nick of time.
Can't wait for another update!
Dante having his pizza taken away from him just makes me want to give him a big ol' hug. Aw don't worry Dante, perhaps this will give you some restraint! I like how Dante had the deal going on with the blood seal. I gotta be honest it's been done over in quite a few stories, but I have not seen many do it the way you do it, which is a good thing. I like how you built up the scene leading to his brother, going through his emotions of anger and betrayal. Nice going.
I can see that Maisha (cool, funky name btw) has some issues that are riding on her shoulders. At first I thought she was going to be this average little thing but she's an adult that has to make some adult choices. Btw, I THANK YOU for giving her a differnt background this time instead of being some high-school/college student. Ugh that gets tired and old. I could totally imagine the monster and what it looked like, even more sewwt was how Dante saved her in the nick of time.
Can't wait for another update!
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April 24, 2013 at 12:00 AM
This story, while still too early to tell, is turning out to be a great read. It's rare to find a story like this on here so I'm glad you put some thought and effort into it. Your OC seems likeable and realistic; and much different from the rest so that's a big plus. I can't tell you how many girls are 5'5 and brunette on here (eyeroll). I also like how you gave Dante a mature side in this. While he's an asshole of a goofball, he still has his other emotions that he shows from time to time.
I'm off to read more!
I'm off to read more!