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May 28, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Wasn't really a fan of the lemon for this one. You know why :/
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May 14, 2014 at 12:00 AM
This story...
I've read several of your assorted works, and the majority of them are really great to read as pure plain pornos. This is different though. Unlike most other multi-chaptered stories, you're goal is smut along with a retelling of a pokemon travel that is similar to one of the games.
Leaf is a slut, flat out slut. You don't skirt the issue. She takes her 'weaknesses' for sexual intercourse and internal dopamine release, and embraces them. It does set up for some interesting events, the way she lets herself get used and uses herself. That said, you do bring forth various pokemon battles, and I actually find myself re-reading the story for the duels just as much as I do for the blatant smut. You have given her a brain capable of thinking on some level, even though I'd love to see her use it more in places other then bartering and battling. Leaf has almost NO moral limits, making for fun times that everyone wishes they could have. The characters are not always the same types, giving us variety. (even though they almost always look 'perfect' with little to no bad blemishes. Scars don't count. You don't really find anyone that Leaf would have an 'aversion' to). And while I like development in character and world, this is an Adult+ story, to expect any world explanation or major character development is bloody stupid.
I'll confess though, it's hard for me to enjoy your work to the fullest extent for two reasons:
1): This is my problem, I am not a Pokemon fan. I fell out of the fanbase after the Johto League arc in the anime ended, picked back up in the 7th gen/season/whatnot, and lost interest again. I'd love to get back in the series now, but when I see how many god forsaken pokemon there are, needless to say, I realize that it would take to much time that I don't have, JUST to re-learn the main representative pokemon from each generation and type would be mind-numbing enough.
2): You have great description, but no punctuation. No Exclamation Points (!), No Question Marks (?), and no periods (.) Everything becomes really hard to read and enjoy. This problem has been consistent throughout this entire work, and I'll have to check your other works for it. You have no idea how much more exciting a smut scene can be if you have a scream ended with an Exclamation, or how one's own mind will snap back into focusing on the story when a question is asked. It's weird, because other then that and the occasional capitalization error, your story is grammatically great.
The only other 'issue' I've had that is noteworthy is that the LeafXHuman Male f*cking has become a pretty similar routine recently. Head, Vagina, ass, or something of that nature. Just needs a bit of a shake-up.
You have a talent, don't let it go to waste, especially not on this story. You've done a great job, keep it going!
I've read several of your assorted works, and the majority of them are really great to read as pure plain pornos. This is different though. Unlike most other multi-chaptered stories, you're goal is smut along with a retelling of a pokemon travel that is similar to one of the games.
Leaf is a slut, flat out slut. You don't skirt the issue. She takes her 'weaknesses' for sexual intercourse and internal dopamine release, and embraces them. It does set up for some interesting events, the way she lets herself get used and uses herself. That said, you do bring forth various pokemon battles, and I actually find myself re-reading the story for the duels just as much as I do for the blatant smut. You have given her a brain capable of thinking on some level, even though I'd love to see her use it more in places other then bartering and battling. Leaf has almost NO moral limits, making for fun times that everyone wishes they could have. The characters are not always the same types, giving us variety. (even though they almost always look 'perfect' with little to no bad blemishes. Scars don't count. You don't really find anyone that Leaf would have an 'aversion' to). And while I like development in character and world, this is an Adult+ story, to expect any world explanation or major character development is bloody stupid.
I'll confess though, it's hard for me to enjoy your work to the fullest extent for two reasons:
1): This is my problem, I am not a Pokemon fan. I fell out of the fanbase after the Johto League arc in the anime ended, picked back up in the 7th gen/season/whatnot, and lost interest again. I'd love to get back in the series now, but when I see how many god forsaken pokemon there are, needless to say, I realize that it would take to much time that I don't have, JUST to re-learn the main representative pokemon from each generation and type would be mind-numbing enough.
2): You have great description, but no punctuation. No Exclamation Points (!), No Question Marks (?), and no periods (.) Everything becomes really hard to read and enjoy. This problem has been consistent throughout this entire work, and I'll have to check your other works for it. You have no idea how much more exciting a smut scene can be if you have a scream ended with an Exclamation, or how one's own mind will snap back into focusing on the story when a question is asked. It's weird, because other then that and the occasional capitalization error, your story is grammatically great.
The only other 'issue' I've had that is noteworthy is that the LeafXHuman Male f*cking has become a pretty similar routine recently. Head, Vagina, ass, or something of that nature. Just needs a bit of a shake-up.
You have a talent, don't let it go to waste, especially not on this story. You've done a great job, keep it going!
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May 13, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Is that the same Sean from Johto Heat by TheBreeder ?! I never thought he would show up in Lust Green. I hope to see him again as it looks like that he and Leaf seem to really connect. It would have b been great to have Sean show Leaf how enjoyable it was to have Rhydon use Horn Drill on her pussy. There is always next time hopefully
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May 13, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Wow... been a while since I saw Sean, and he is more perverted than I remember. You definitely set up some kind of thing between them, even if its unintentional . Is Sean going to be Leaf's love interest? Or will she become his slave? I remember Sean being a patient and respectful guy at times, so I can safely say that Sean won't force Leaf to abandon her journey if she was his slave. Regardless, I hope Sean appears again soon. Keep up the great work.
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May 13, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Is Sean going to be a recurring character? I like him, he seems to be quite interesting . in personality and so far is the only character who tied with Leaf. Also I am starting to see some repitition with the chapters. Almost every chapter with a human male tends to follow this pattern, mouth, pussy, and then ass. Could it be possible to do something like item insertion to spice things up? Having Leaf be Sean's slave would open more possibilities than you expect.
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May 12, 2014 at 12:00 AM
oh its back! cool.
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April 18, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Here you'll get both a review and a short character description, if you still accept those.
As for a character idea, I'd say a lean man at the age of twenty, a visible layer of muscles around his arms, legs, chest, stomach, etc. Snow white hair and red eyes, no facial hair. I have no other specifications for now, since I'm not arrogant enough to believe this character will appear in a later chapter.
Pokemon Lust Green version has become one of my all time favorites. The way you describe both the surroundings, or setting, and the way you've written the story itself, and all parallels that followed, is beyond the meaning of "art". If nothing else, then this can easily rise even further, but following that logic, there is always the chance of a downfall.
Everything from the characters personality to the way this world works, so to speak, seems to me like how our own world would have been if it were to be inhabited by pokemon.
I have nothing but praise for you and I long for, yet dread the day this story reaches it's grand finally.
As for a character idea, I'd say a lean man at the age of twenty, a visible layer of muscles around his arms, legs, chest, stomach, etc. Snow white hair and red eyes, no facial hair. I have no other specifications for now, since I'm not arrogant enough to believe this character will appear in a later chapter.
Pokemon Lust Green version has become one of my all time favorites. The way you describe both the surroundings, or setting, and the way you've written the story itself, and all parallels that followed, is beyond the meaning of "art". If nothing else, then this can easily rise even further, but following that logic, there is always the chance of a downfall.
Everything from the characters personality to the way this world works, so to speak, seems to me like how our own world would have been if it were to be inhabited by pokemon.
I have nothing but praise for you and I long for, yet dread the day this story reaches it's grand finally.
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March 26, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Great chapter. Been looking forward to a new leaf chapter for a while
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March 25, 2014 at 12:00 AM
These just keep getting better and better ;)
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February 3, 2014 at 12:00 AM
I think I see want you're planning with Kabara and Gravaler.