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for Pokemon Lust Green version

by Fanfictionfan360

person megadeth425
schedule April 9, 2013 at 12:00 AM
The fact you keep escalating makes me really curious for how you'll top the previous effort. Keep it up.
schedule April 7, 2013 at 12:00 AM
next chap please
person thatguy
schedule April 6, 2013 at 12:00 AM
One quick protip for all your stories, because this is a running problem. I want you to read each paragraph out loud, and every time you have to stop and take a breath, put a period there. You suffer badly from run-on sentences, and reading your stories give me the mental impression of one of those girls who can go on and on without a breath is speaking to me. Your ideas are really, really good, but the structure of how it's written kills it for me.
schedule April 5, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Ohh a gangbang! and oh more healing by nurse joy!
person Rillis
schedule April 5, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Loved the opening line about the title. Great Story as usual
schedule April 4, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Awesome as per usual m8. My only complaint is you acting like gamefreak and teasing us with the misty bit. All im going to say is that the next dvd cover better have misty and leaf on it.
JMAHWK
person Gryphon
schedule April 4, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Man good story keep it up, I like that you put little details in it and I hope you can get the next chapter out as soon as possible. :)
schedule April 4, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Nice job. And I take it Pikachu and Bulbasaur will 'get along' quite well.
schedule April 3, 2013 at 12:00 AM
that was DEFINITELY the most interesting chapter I've read ;)
schedule April 1, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Wow that was hot and brutal! every time he loses huh, increasing in brutality....