Hope you continue with this, because it has a lot of potential.
My favorites that I would like to see are Tali(#1!), Katsumi, Ashley, and Liara.
Hope to see chapters with 2 or more girls, and with supporting characters as well.
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I have a Tali thing, but I know that working her into a story isn't for everyone. Still, your story is very well written, possibly one of the best on here imho (yeah it's short but you had some good imagery). I look forward to any character you chose to have Shep be with. Looking like Kelly next, so I'm anticipating the next chapter.
Also, liked the detail in the death recollection, even if it was a bit morbid. Just a little something you don't see many authors do.