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for Ada and Helena: Bad End

by Demetrius

person pokpokpokpok
schedule August 21, 2014 at 12:00 AM
it's cool.
person Focus13
schedule August 2, 2014 at 12:00 AM
nice
person Anonymous
schedule December 6, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Three whole lines of space between each sentence/paragraph. Completely unnecessary. No sense in the story at all. It wasn't appealing to the eye and it didn't even make sense how one scene got into another. Spelling errors. Fix the story or get rid of it. Or something.
person DrkVrtx
schedule October 8, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Huh...now this would've made for a preeeeeety interesting campaign, I'm sure. DLC perhaps? :P