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May 30, 2012 at 12:00 AM
There seems to be a real lack of Street Fighter fics. Ocasionaly you find a gem amidst the very few. I think this one is a little rough but nonetheless still a gem.
I liked the overall plot of the story, even though my inner fan doesn't aknowledge Cammy's actions as in character but it does leave us with a hot situation. The main problem I saw is the lack of description. You build up to a scene really well but then when the scene peaks, you leave in a whimper because of the lack of description.
The perfect example is everytime you do a time skip ( exception to the months later). That period you skipped , to me, would be integral to the story, because its on them that the action really happens. And when you're liking the story and at it's peak you see a "five hours later" you feel a little robbed.
Anyway, liked the fic and will definetly keep an eye on your other works.
I liked the overall plot of the story, even though my inner fan doesn't aknowledge Cammy's actions as in character but it does leave us with a hot situation. The main problem I saw is the lack of description. You build up to a scene really well but then when the scene peaks, you leave in a whimper because of the lack of description.
The perfect example is everytime you do a time skip ( exception to the months later). That period you skipped , to me, would be integral to the story, because its on them that the action really happens. And when you're liking the story and at it's peak you see a "five hours later" you feel a little robbed.
Anyway, liked the fic and will definetly keep an eye on your other works.