rate_review Reviews

This is probably the first ever CoD:MW fic that I've read where there is absolutely no mention of Ghost's signature skull balaclava. A nice change, for once.

This story was stunning, to say the least. I actually imagine the two with switched roles, as does my sister, but this was new and I certainly enjoyed it! I'm new to writing erotica myself and if you have any tips for writing such, I'd love to hear them, haha (:

Anyways, you did an amazing job! I love the way you write-- it's brilliant! I wish it wasn't so short, but I hope to see more from you in the CoD area! More of these two or the other Modern Warfare characters!! <3

Have a great day and, again, I hope to see more from you!!

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I have to say, I really enjoyed reading this! I love how you 'designed' Gary, and I LOVE the interaction between Gary and Simon. I can't honestly think of anything I didn't like about this story! <3 I would LOVE to see more CoD: Modern Warfare stories written by you, Lisbetadair!!

I think your strongest points are the internal dialog/confusion that Ghost is experiencing in the lead up to the sex scene. The most outside description that you give is during the physically intimate moments of Ghost and Roach. Carrying more external description (sight, taist, touch, smell..) into other areas of the story will help you set the mood, and can help boost the already good internal dialog.
Good luck writing!

I thought Anderson was an american...maybe I am wrong but that...I wanted MORE MORE MORE!!! Nice writing STYLE keep it up! can't wait for CH 2!!!!