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by luluzat

person Anon
schedule December 21, 2012 at 12:00 AM
The proper spelling is 'Keelah'
schedule March 15, 2012 at 12:00 AM
EXCELLENT story i agree with you on the ending definitely could have put abit more affort into the final scene but anyway keep up the good work am looking forward to see where you take this story
schedule March 15, 2012 at 12:00 AM
You might want to learn how to punctuate properly before writing anything.
person Wankyudo
schedule March 15, 2012 at 12:00 AM
As someone said, you should do some heavy editting (Or have a friend edit) the story before posting. A lot of run-ons, and not the best spacing.

Oh, and it's Keelah. Their favorite saying to each other is Keelah se'lai