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May 12, 2013 at 12:00 AM
awwww its nice too see that good guys can win.
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March 12, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I really do hate to leave negative reviews - I would much rather not respond at all when lacking in helpful criticism. In fact you may even take this comment as a sort of perverse praise, but...
This story really sickens me. I realize I am likely not the intended audience, and that such a visceral reaction is proof that the concept of the fic has been executed well, except that whatever eroticism could be present in the story is overshadowed by the horror that this is one, long, extended rape-fic. Not just on the part of Tali literally raping all her crew mates, physically, mentally, and emotionally - but her character itself being warped into something truly hideous and monstrous.
I've thought for a few days now on whether to comment on this fic or not. I ran my thoughts by some of my own readers, seeing it as somewhat akin to complaining that snuff is offensive - that I should likely have known better before indulging my curiousity. All this is true, but I think I really should say something, even as this fic is still ongoing. Maybe, eecially because it d ongoing.
Not to stop writing it... It is clearly popular and a project you and others enjoy. I am not in any way putting my view of it on a pedestal; I simply wish to share my own impressions and thoughts. You've written a story here that is truly and deeply disturbing. It is an achievement, I think, but a terrible one, too.
This story really sickens me. I realize I am likely not the intended audience, and that such a visceral reaction is proof that the concept of the fic has been executed well, except that whatever eroticism could be present in the story is overshadowed by the horror that this is one, long, extended rape-fic. Not just on the part of Tali literally raping all her crew mates, physically, mentally, and emotionally - but her character itself being warped into something truly hideous and monstrous.
I've thought for a few days now on whether to comment on this fic or not. I ran my thoughts by some of my own readers, seeing it as somewhat akin to complaining that snuff is offensive - that I should likely have known better before indulging my curiousity. All this is true, but I think I really should say something, even as this fic is still ongoing. Maybe, eecially because it d ongoing.
Not to stop writing it... It is clearly popular and a project you and others enjoy. I am not in any way putting my view of it on a pedestal; I simply wish to share my own impressions and thoughts. You've written a story here that is truly and deeply disturbing. It is an achievement, I think, but a terrible one, too.
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February 24, 2013 at 12:00 AM
There's not really any point in putting up all these "padding" chapters. We already KNOW Tali somehow got the entire crew under her control for her petty, undeserved she-does-not-have-time-for-this-the-galaxy-is-in-grave-peril-and-you-cannot-FUCK-the-reapers-into-submission plan. And by the way, it's NOT the same thing, having Shepherd take her on the ship then forcing Miranda to be a slave along with the others. Tali's motives are purely selfish and, as we saw in the games, her father's research wouldn't have done diddly squat to actually help the war effort because the Geth, as I said, would have been happy to help if you just approached them. Her reasons for doing this are stupid. All we're waiting for is to see how things will end, and wishing Tali pays for everything she's done to her friends, who put their trust in her and who saved her when she was under attack by the Heretics, need I remind you, only for her to pull THIS crap.
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February 17, 2013 at 12:00 AM
ok seriously someone better pwn Tali soon, and punish her ass HARD!
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February 16, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Allow me to directly quote from the game to empasize how hypocritical Tali is being.
"Tali, your father was running brutal experiments. If the victims had been human, I WOULD DAMN WELL BE TELLING THE ALLIANCE." And, in case you forgot, they wre unnecessary, because as Legion proved, all her race had to do was just approach the Geth in peace to put an end to the conflict. Yet despite her dad and her being in the wrong and despite the whole galaxy being in grave danger, I.E we do not have time for personal vendettas and Shepherd is the only one who can save everyone...Tali is holding onto a grudge she has no right to hold onto.
UP YOUR BIG PURPLE ASS, BITCH.
"Tali, your father was running brutal experiments. If the victims had been human, I WOULD DAMN WELL BE TELLING THE ALLIANCE." And, in case you forgot, they wre unnecessary, because as Legion proved, all her race had to do was just approach the Geth in peace to put an end to the conflict. Yet despite her dad and her being in the wrong and despite the whole galaxy being in grave danger, I.E we do not have time for personal vendettas and Shepherd is the only one who can save everyone...Tali is holding onto a grudge she has no right to hold onto.
UP YOUR BIG PURPLE ASS, BITCH.
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January 26, 2013 at 12:00 AM
PLZZZZ thell me there will be more chapter soon, i cant wait to see what happens next.
oh and i cant help but wonder..shouldn´t EDI notice that something is wrong with the crew, since she is observing them the entire time
oh and i cant help but wonder..shouldn´t EDI notice that something is wrong with the crew, since she is observing them the entire time
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January 26, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Way to completely ignore the whole damn point of the series and to totally misunderstand everything it's about in regards to how people are supposed to trust and work together for a common good. Nice going.
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January 26, 2013 at 12:00 AM
This is actually the first review I have ever left on this site. What compelled me to read this story? The Illium chapter. That was amazing. I especially like how the Eclipse sisters marked her as their property. That in itself is an awesome premise.
Keep up the good work.
Keep up the good work.
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January 25, 2013 at 12:00 AM
This was a very interesting piece of work. A story about Tali with lots of sex scenes.
Well, that's one that has submitted to Tali, but what of the other 4? Will you tell those stories or will you skip right to the final showdown? (you kind of showed us readers hints as to who the five were during Miranda's fall. Jack for sure was a target. Kasumi ... I don't quite know. Same with Jacob and Joker, iffy.)
Guesses to the five that Tali will personally take down:
1. Miranda (which you have now completed)
2. Kasumi
3. Shepard
4. Jack
5. Ashley? (even though she's not on the Normandy)
6. If not Ashley then Jacob? (wouldn't make sense since he doesn't seem to really resent/interact with Tali)
A Question: We ever going to see Thane, Liara, Grunt, Mordin (a scene instead of a mention), Garrus (same except instead of teasing), Wrex, Legion, or (since you have added DLC characters) how about the Shadow Broker getting some action? It would be a very intriguing take on how it would all occur and play out for or against Tali's reign.
Another Question: We know that the device works on humans, can it also work on aliens? Has Tali ever tried?
Last Question: Miranda's fall takes a good few weeks to play out. You also show hints that Shepard is starting to catch on. If you do tell the other 4 stories, will they take place at the same time during Miranda's fall or will Tali only take down the Five one by one? (it wouldn't make sense for the latter to occur though since Shepard is starting to investigate.)
Okay, now last question/suggestion: Will a few (at least one) of the five that Tali is personally taking down refuse to become her slave? It would be nice to actually see this play out. Of the people I can imagine refusing would either be Jack, Shepard, and/or Ashley.
Otherwise, best of luck, stay healthy, and update soon!
-Sky66
Well, that's one that has submitted to Tali, but what of the other 4? Will you tell those stories or will you skip right to the final showdown? (you kind of showed us readers hints as to who the five were during Miranda's fall. Jack for sure was a target. Kasumi ... I don't quite know. Same with Jacob and Joker, iffy.)
Guesses to the five that Tali will personally take down:
1. Miranda (which you have now completed)
2. Kasumi
3. Shepard
4. Jack
5. Ashley? (even though she's not on the Normandy)
6. If not Ashley then Jacob? (wouldn't make sense since he doesn't seem to really resent/interact with Tali)
A Question: We ever going to see Thane, Liara, Grunt, Mordin (a scene instead of a mention), Garrus (same except instead of teasing), Wrex, Legion, or (since you have added DLC characters) how about the Shadow Broker getting some action? It would be a very intriguing take on how it would all occur and play out for or against Tali's reign.
Another Question: We know that the device works on humans, can it also work on aliens? Has Tali ever tried?
Last Question: Miranda's fall takes a good few weeks to play out. You also show hints that Shepard is starting to catch on. If you do tell the other 4 stories, will they take place at the same time during Miranda's fall or will Tali only take down the Five one by one? (it wouldn't make sense for the latter to occur though since Shepard is starting to investigate.)
Okay, now last question/suggestion: Will a few (at least one) of the five that Tali is personally taking down refuse to become her slave? It would be nice to actually see this play out. Of the people I can imagine refusing would either be Jack, Shepard, and/or Ashley.
Otherwise, best of luck, stay healthy, and update soon!
-Sky66
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September 15, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Excellent work, please continue