rate_review Reviews

I love this story, and finally someone wrote something with Ysolda in it.
I would like to see a scene with Lydia as just a after battle high on adrenaline type of thing, there are not enough of Lydia with a nonhumans in my opinion.
can't wait for the next chapter

Really liking this story so far, just wanted to say that. Probably some of the best written stuff I've seen on here.

As for suggestions? Well I'm positive I've already said Ysolda, but for stuff I've NEVER seen... I don't think I've ever seen anyone do an elf girl of any kind. There's two I can think who have possibilities. First there's that Altmer Thieves Guild fence in Windhelm, Nirayne. Even if your character doesn't join the guild, he could probably need something from her.

Also there is a Bosmer in Riften called Nivenor, she's sort of rich and sort of spoiled, but she's also being cheated on by her husband Bolli, perhaps she'd want some revenge sex is all I'm saying. XD

Keep up the good job!

Re: Lydia

I feel it would be improper to exclude her because you don't want to do 'just another lydia scene' when the market is saturated. While Lydia could suffice in the role of foil, I think it should be because you think it benefits the story more.

It's might be worth considering how Lydia could develop over time as a romantic interest, or keep her in the 'bro' demographic.

Really like this story, mainly because it's plot with a bit of porn, and the main character is really fun. Also all the characters are really well rounded personality wise. Great job and hope to see more.

Chapters like this aren't pointless so don't be so hard on yourself. Its the little chapters like this that build the story's plot and help us learn about the character's... well, character, it builds thier personality and that of Kai's companions.

Glad you liked my idea and I can't wait to see what you come up with.

Personally, even though I'm here for smut, I enjoy chapters like chapter 7. It helps add character to the story and makes Kai & Co. appear more realistic. So even though you may dislike that part, it should stick around as a little break in the action.

That's my belief, anyhow, so take it for what it is.

You are being to hard on yourself. There's nothing wrong with Ch7. Sometimes it's good to slow down a story. The chapter gives some more insight into the characters and it helps establish Tel as thane. So really you shouldn't be upset with it. Now with that said I would like to request that we get to see a darker side to tel and for him to join the Family. I don't think it fits him right now but maybe something could send him down a darker path. that made be your intent already judging by the the Title of the Story. keep up the good work.

Liking how you follow the Dragonborn plotline. Fingers crossed for a Khajit or Argonian pairing. Maybe a rough course with a Dark Brotherhood assassin?

I'm absolutely enjoying this! Doing a fantastic job!

Major kudos!

this is funny the protaganist is not a pussy and sooner or later he'l be getting some pussy so i cant wait to see what comes next.

also deffinetly do kahjits cause there awesome