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Good start. I look forward to seeing where this goes, and like how the characters have been portrayed so far.

I'd second the suggestion that a beta would be beneficial: you write well but a bit sloppily.

It is funny about how things can change, viewpoints in particular. I never used to care much for stories with M-preg notices in the summary (no matter what the fan-dom was), but now I find myself giving them a peek or two. I think you're doing okay so far. The first chapter went by too fast, but I enoyed your brashly funny version of Leon's character in the second one. Spell-check and editing are good rules to keep in mind. I noticed some grammarical mistakes here and there. It'd do you good to fix them on your own or in conjuction with a trusted friend/beta.

Any-who, I've been wanting to write a Resident Evil centered fan-fiction of my own, but the pieces have yet to come together. I don't know if you're planning on moving the plot in a concrete direction and/or if you want ideas, but I'd like you to hear me out. I can totally picture a virus infeced Wesker seeking out Chris (and not letting anyone stand in his way) so the two could be together as "mates" or something along those lines. For better or for worse, the previous suggestion has morphed into my personally secret prompt. That virus could have some untested side-effects, you know? And, I could easily see Wesker finding his cure in Chris Redfield. Tangent aside, I hope, above all else, that events in this story won't stray from a consensual setting.

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Good start, looking forward to seeing more. =)