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So, yeah, not a review, but I looked back - my first review ever for this story was in mid-2011. That's probably about the time I started reading this.

And in the homecoming game chapter, where Phoenix pulls a Hail Mary tackle for Jak? It mirrors his sacrifice in The Lost Frontier, right? You wanna know when I figured that out?

Today.

Freakin' today.

3 AND A HALF YEARS.

That's it, it's been a great run, but my fanfiction reading license is being revoked. Done.

It sucks that Taryn wiped out, but at least Dax was there to step up. Even if he didn't realize he was doing it in the heat of the moment. lol

Guess we'll see how well our boys do, especially our little stand-in manager, in all things business and pleasure. ;)

Yay, outtakes are back! And yay, the dreaded return of school is held off in favor of Dax having to put on the pants and fluffy smexiness! Thank you so much! Keep up the fine work!

P.S. To use football rather than baseball terms as euphemisms, ENOUGH FIELD GOALS! LET'S HAVE THE TOUCHDOWN ALREADY!

P.P.S. I'm the exact same way when on pain meds. I asked my mom to record my ranting after my wisdoms were out for posterity in the same breath after saying her hair looks like a helmet and thanking her for quote 'pushing me through your vagina'

And there arises a thunderous applause, for Daxter has achieved Ace Blow Job Capabilities! Dayum. *fans self* Jak needs to get on it though and make his little redhead scream. Your move, Fake Jock.

Jak giving a blow job is going to be great though, I'm eagerly waiting for it.

I got intensely giggly with those references to my sketch page, but oh my gosh, I died laughing at the outtake of Killer judging them hardcore for their unsatisfactory mating rituals. They should have at least had one litter by now! *Weasel indignation*

...Also is Razer creeped out by scary Alien movies? I detected maybe a hint of flustered transfer student? That'd be fun to read about on their side of the Dorm wall. Phoenix is probably teasing him something fierce.

Daxter really is hardcore though. Take-charge little guy. Gotta love him.

*snort, snort* I loved the chapter! Loved Killer's outtake thoughts. Hehe

One of these days, Jak is going to suprise Dax with a slow-torturing BJ that will cause the whole hall to wake up from Daxter's climax-induced screaming. Torn will NOT be pleased.


The Ferret Boss is forever watchful, judging your every squeal and toe-curling orgasm, Dax. Do not disappoint your resident voyeur...*DOOK, DOOK, DOOK*...*blows out cigarette smoke*

*squeal* Daxter is going to "explore" himself!!! Time for the embarrassing dildo purchase scene!

Love it! I started reading this story ages ago and I was so happy to come back and see so many new chapters (obviously I had to power read through the whole thing again to be sure I hadn't missed any details!) I love your characterisation, almost every line is something I can envision them saying which, of course, does wonders and really helps the focus to be placed on the story - as opposed to constantly rethinking when it just doesn't click!

On a personal note, I'm glad Keira isn't demonised as she often can be in Jak/Daxter fiction. I think she's a fantastic character.

I had a quick flick through the reviews and I think you made the right choice altering your old out takes. Whilst I haven't read the others, I think the one at the end of the current chapter (24?) is fantastic and in good taste.

I hope you're motivated to keep it up for as long as you keep enjoying it. I think you've got a real skill for capturing characters personalities!

Okay, it's official. You have kasooker me into reading this story. I don't know how, but ya did. And ya know what? I like this story! :D

Ah i love this story, I'm glad is still going strong and you're taking time showing how their relationship is becoming stronger day by day. It's rare to see stories like this. Anyway! Patiently , awaiting the next chapter.