rate_review Reviews

I know you've read this once already, but I just had to reiterate:

Great chapter! I'm really liking the variety in this story: going from the soft and cuddly movie night to a Halloween party and chase scene should seem jarring, but it really flows here. As usual, your pacing is impeccable, which must be pretty hard to manage since this the the first story with clear time gaps between chapters, as well as AU character development to deal with.

The scene with Erol was amazing and gave us something to be apprehensive over, while the kiss was rather unexpected and gave us some relationship development to anticipate. The chase scene was brilliant too, loved that Jak knew to avoid the alley.

Glad Dax seems to be getting over his jock-phobia...although scaring Jak to try and distract him from the kiss seemed a bit cruel. Maybe payback for the ass slap?




Okay, some new stuff after a second read through:

Nice play with their costumes matching up to the regular universe (although I suppose having Dax dress as a cuddly animal would have been a bit too much). Having Erol as a police officer was a nice touch.

Your scene descriptions this chapter were just plain beautiful. Makes me look forward to the season, even though the weather stays mostly the same where I'm at.

I have to admit that I was half expecting Daxter to run after that kiss. He probably would have if their relationship hadn't developed a bit during that storm. Although I do suspect that he wouldn't have gotten too far before stumbling into a light pole or tripping over his own feet if he had tried to bolt.

Anyways, looking forward to the next chapter as always, and I'm glad the site problems seem to be resolved.

Now that I know the magical properties of Phoenix-cheek, I shall have Zelda call him on it. *insert evil laughter here* And the fluff will come. Razer just needs to stop being so...Razer first. That, unfortunately, really does need to get beaten out him. It will happen sooner than later, though, so bare with me for a little while longer. It'll be worth it, I promise.

Dear god, I should not like how much of an asshole you make Erol. You really make it fun to hate his sleazebag ways. Even the game can't boast that for me, so congratulations. Again, I'm ever humbled by the fact that you take my prodding and suggesting as well as you do. It does bad things to my ego. And for the record, I am traumatized by Jinx saying the word "jiggling." I totally hear it in his voice whenever the word comes up now. I can't even look at jello now without remember it, let alone actual jello shots (Muse thought that was particularly hysterical when we went to the drag show earlier).

Keep going! This is where the fun all starts.

GAH! I'm really lovin' this story! At first I was kinda thrown off by the lack of Jak angst (since it basically fuels my existence aha) but then I started to really love the switch up and new perspective. Like, I mean, if Jak had never been taken from him and shoved in prison Daxter would have the harder story. Especially if he had never met Jak. Poor little Dax has no family, Jak is really all he has and in this AU where he doesn’t meet him until college its so cool to see how he woulda developed without Jak by his side. I also never really thought too much of their different speaking styles. In canon it doesn't really draw a line between them since you know they're both super tough and have gone through shit but here its really interesting and emphasises their different backgrounds.

I am totally and madly inlove with chapter 8. I don’t even know how to elaborate on that I just.. I love it. Jak is such a sweetheart and Daxxie oh my god you precious, marred, little baby. Ugh. It is just SO good. Also, headcanon on Daxter's abandonment accepted :)

Also, the thought of Jak having ‘the gay talk’ with Torn made me laugh and 'awww' so hard, oh my god ahaha.

I really love how this story that is so fun and like kinda a cliché AU (in a good way!!) is not just super entertaining and wonderful but also it’s a really neat character study kinda. Like, if things were a bit different this is how the boys and their lives would have turned out. And I don’t know… I guess that’s the point of it but I still just found it really cool!

Okay wow okay I’m gunna stop rambing now and just say: I love every single piece of this story and cannot wait for the next chapter!!! You are fabulous! Update soon! :)

1 question: What is/are frat houses?

I like Studio Ghibli too, My Neighbour Totoro, seen that, but the first one I watched was Spirited Away which I only watched because it had a dragon it, and then I went on to watch the others; Grave of the Fireflies is so sad :( and Porco Rosso I just plain didn't like. Ponyo was on Film4 the other week or so and I only saw about 3 quarters of it cause the signal decided to break on it, not impressed.

I thought the film you were describing was Nausicaa at first but then when the bit about the boy came in I thought wait now it sounds like Laputa - and I have the song from that - Kimi wo nosete, awesome.

And this has to be the first fic I've ever read where Daxter's a virgin but Jak isn't, cause most people do it the other way round.

Hope the next chapter comes along soon, I want to know how Jak gets back in the room.

No. Way. Did you really just reference Castle in the Sky? Just have to mention that that's my favorite studio Ghibli film, and one of my favorite films period.


Anyways, that prank mentioned at the end of chapter 9 really paid off didn't it? I wonder if Jak has caught on to Razer and Phoenix as well, they weren't exactly being subtle about it. I'm also wondering if Razer plans on returning the favor anytime soon...or if Jak might request something similar be done.

I've been loving the bits of angst you've been injecting here and there. I think seeing Daxter so vulnerable and wanting of comfort just kind of hits you right where it hurts you know? And it's such a rare thing in your writing, but very well placed and utilized when it is used (that scene in Fun and Games, chapter 4, for instance). I'm supremely impressed with Jak's self-control in those situations.


Looking forward to that Halloween party, as well as the next chapter of Keep Talking. Thanks for all the hard work!

love this story and all of your other JxD stuff.
small question: I've heard a lot ottselboi dax (ears n' tail on human) stuff in passing but nothing focused on it. WHY IS THAT?

Loved it, had me laughing at the outtakes.I read your story on fanfiction, and thought I would come check it out here for the unedited version.Still like it.I hope to see more soon.

Outtakes are brilliant as always, but more importantly: UST is go! Ahhh, I'm too impatient for them to gradually hook up - when is it kinkysextimes? Although, I am loving the adorable squee moments too, so I'm not really complaining. And yes! Finally Phoenix has done something about Razer. :3 Looking forward to more accidentally witness fluffy moments there ^^
I really enjoy your style and I'm already looking forward to the next update (on whatever story it may be). :D

Castle in the Sky! Loved that movie. 83 I missed my chance to buy it when the rental place closed down, tho. -3- It and Kiki's Delivery Service. Oh well, at least I got the Cowboy Bebop motion picture, and same for The Slayers. XD Got my other Ghibli films from other sources. My Ghibli love is so old, I have Princess Mononoke on VHS. Remember those? Speaking of which, I need to get the DVD sometime. Lordy, I've gotten old..............

Enough anime geekage. Jak and Dax geekage time! *glomps* They are slowly edging toward mutual attraction. Jak taking baby steps while Dax gets his shit together? Perfectly fine! It's happening, and that's what matters. :3

Congrats on (what I'm assuming is) a successful move! Here's to a future filled with Jak&Daxxie-ness! *raises cup of Dr. Pepper* KANPAI!!

Smidgeon of jealous? You call a whole shelf a smidgeon? Either I need a bigger room, or we need to define some terms here...

*le sigh* You do such fun and fluffy things even while you're out torturing someone (which I'd like to say again that you achieved very well even if the scene wasn't behaving for you). It's almost not fair. Yeah, I know, different set of circumstances between groups, different motivational backgrounds, I'm a drama-monger, blah, blah. Seriously though, after that piece of fluff, I feel like a total heel for what I'm about to do to Razer in the next little bit. I may have made him earn it, but it really does seem like I need to work on my fluff quotient for this series.

And I still maintain that Phoenix-cheek sounds like some sort of power-up. +10 to Soothing or something. Or maybe it's a counterpart to a Phoenix Down? That could have some interesting potential later...

As always, you're doing a great job, even if it doesn't feel like it. Hang in there! The fun stuff will get here sooner than you think!