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Wow, I don't know the workings of this site, but that's ridic that it hid the story because of that...uck.

ANYWAY, I figured I should review this chapter before the next one pops up, so...Okay, Dax is taking a CREATIVE WRITING CLASS? that so fits! I had a little happy fit because I did the Creative Writing thing when I was in college too...I wonder what stories he's going to tell?? ;D And they have 3 classes together, how awesome! I can't get the image of Daxter snoring on Jak's shoulder during lectures out of my head!
VIN. The mere mention of Vin and his appearance is getting me all giddy!

And wow, the fight. For a while between your little sneak peek and the actual chapter I was afraid it was going to be Daxter, but Razer makes a lot more sense at this stage(especially after reading his side of the incident!) Poor Phoenix though...
And Sig was PERFECT in that scene. Love it.

Aww, but the boys are both so stressed now, I can't wait to see them finally relax with each other after their horrible day...

And I will have a broken heart if Daxter can't find a cover for his shift! I really will! (Jak needs his soft and fluffy rabbit's foot boyfriend!) And I'm all hyped up on football with playoff season and my team doing awesome, so I'm looking forward to more of the football stuff hopefully!

Well, that's about it for now? I'll be watching for the new update with excitement! And it's so lovely to be seeing you on Tumblr! I promise to keep the Jaxter art coming, as much as I can manage!

And I will have you know you are basically a catalyst to me officially wanting a pet Ferret because of this story!

Ouch, sorry to hear about the author's note situation, I was wondering why the fic disappeared like that. Perhaps you could move the outtakes out of the author's note and into the main body? They are kind of a part of the fic after all, and that would give plenty room for review replies. There's also the option of cutting the fic into separate parts, maybe based on semesters ("Room and Board: Semester 2", etc.), which might allow for a few more outtakes in this part, and a renewed limit for them in the next part.


Anyways, this chapter was certainly interesting. Razor snapping like that, I'm dying to hear the cause of it. The setup for the next semester looks interesting as well, with Jak and Dax sharing three classes. Looking forward to things heating up between the two of them, now that Dax has finally admitted to himself that he has a crush on Jak. Things getting more and more awkward would be fun as well of course. As for the big game coming up, I think I can guess what's going to happen if Taryn's info is correct. I'm probably wrong, but it would be a fun route to take IMO; you'd turn it into a masterpiece like you did with that storm chapter.


Anyways, hope the new year finds you well, and thanks for working so hard for us over the holidays!

*SQUEE* Yay you updated thank you. I can't wait for more ^^

WOAH. Razer, wtf? O_O So much for J&D cuddle-time. Now, I'm off to Grimreaper Chibi's story to see if there's any light to be shone on Razer's side of this.

Btw, I can't help but imagine KiddieJak playing the part of that kid by the ice machine. Also, in that last outtake, I wouldn't be surprised if Taryn burned the place down herself. X3

Anyway, see you at the next update! ^w^

Right... A better day... You keep thinking that way, Dax. By the time we're done with this, you're going to be so happy for little kids that don't listen. (And I know I shouldn't be encouraging this, but if he totally ends up burning the place down, he doesn't have to work on Saturday!)

Anyway--I really have to say thank you for pandering to this scene for me. Considering how long ago the whole thing was written, I'm glad to see it didn't have to get thrown into the "I'm still working things out" pile. You've done a marvelous job of running with this silly idea of mine, which is only further proof of your most awesome-est writing skillz. Yes, you can hit me for that, but you totally don't get to call Razer and Phoenix attention whores (even if they are)! This is what, the third time they've all managed to interact on some level in written form? For guys that live next to each other and everything, three times in thirteen chapters isn't a lot. And please, Daxter has all the attention-seeking drama. You know this to be true. Besides, you're the one running about with that stupid fake mustache and cackling about things to come like a vaudeville villain here. If you didn't want the plot in your (or their) life, you shouldn't have asked a certain neko into the storyline.

Oh, and as far as writing in real time goes, I know this guy who knows a guy. His name's Dave and he's kind of an insufferable prick until you get to know him, but I think the two of you might be able to work out some sort of a deal...

Awww, man! That's a cruel cliff-hanger you've left us on! Also, now I can't wait for Rule 39 to show what happened... or will it not update until Phoenix can get around to soothing the poor ruffled beast that is Razer? Graah! Inquiring minds must wait! And squirm on the edge of their seats as they do! (I know Grimreaperchibi writes Rule 39, but since you're both sort of collaborating, it's still a valid comment here.)

Also, Phoenix's prank in the shower was horrible, but delicious. It's good to know he's equal opportunity in his devilishness and it's good to hear that Jak is also concerned about Razer. Friendship! I loved how Jak was amazed that Razer apologized to him too. Hah hah! Of course he'd be amazed, but it makes perfect sense that no one would dare bring down the wrath of Jak onto them if it could be avoided. :P :D

The shower outtake was also great. Heh heh. Actually, I do wonder what Razer's and Dax's reactions would be if Phoenix had a little quickie with Jak in the shower some time. I'm pretty sure they'd both be kind of heart-broken (though Razer would never admit it.) I have to say, now that I've thought of it, that is a decidedly juicy mental image. Would you mind at least sharing it with Razer or Dax? I know you have things all planned out, but it might make a good outtake, if nothing else. Or share it with Grimreaperchibi at least... Though I suppose y'all have probably already imagined that at least once already! ;)

Incidentally, there were a few rare points of conversation where it took me a minute to figure out which character was speaking. Not too many, mostly the very beginning and then the initial exchange between Ximon and Daxter, off the top of my head. I realize you're busy but very eager to move the chapters along and I'm right there with you in that, but I think a few more "said" tags sprinkled in the longer bits of pure dialog would be helpful in future.

Er, I'm a doofus. Of course you're also going to tell us what happened in the next chapter and possibly sooner than Rule 39 will, but I meant that I'm just very eager to also find out from Razer or Phoenix's POV, since I'm insanely curious on either perspective. Especially if it's in the aftermath and all, which may include lots of comforting and what not.

And Dax is also going to need some comforting from Jak after that long, horrible shift. Poor guy. I do hope he can find someone to cover his shift on Saturday! :1

It's been obscenely long since I reviewed this, as I am the very definition of "procrastinator"...So here I am! Also I'd like to say that I'm that LadyFitz person over on Tumblr who keeps drawing fluffy doodles for this, so yeah, lol!

ANYWAY Where to start...First, the Halloween chapter was so wonderful and had so many good things I could just read it forever and never get bored. Jinx, Erol, Drunk Dax, Kissy Dax, Ass-slapping, everything. Perfect.

And I love how you brought in this little vein of the conflict with Razer, which has been hinted at, what with the last chapter's little argument at the party...

I just love how everything is starting to speed up, I just hope it doesn't fly by too quickly because I am totally enjoying the thrill of new chapters and shenanigans to read in this story. Poor Dax, and poor boys for completely being into each other and not even KNOWING how mutual it is XD And the way you write Protective Jak will ALWAYYYYYS win my heart with melty warm feelings.

OH GOSH AND KILLER. And the hug. And Killer sticking his head in Dax's shirt. (That may be something I have to draw :D)....

Any way, I could go on and on until I lose coherency about how lovely I find this story to be, BUT I WON'T I'll just like...Doodle it out or something. I just had to get my verbal appreciation out before I ended up procrasinating it for a whole 'nother update, lol.

So Everything is FANTASTIC, though I'm still wondering if there was any truth to that one out-take of Erol beating Dax up in a few chapters?? D: AHH BABIES.

I have a lot of anticipation for the next update <3

ALSO NICE FLUTTERSHY REFERENCE, AWESOME ;D

Wow! Where to begin? I love this story. The build-up has been long and beautiful. I love the crafting of a relationship and this definitely delivers. I love the way the AU has worked so many characters from J&D into it and I'm so glad they're in college, rather than high school. The details about college have all felt perfect too. I only went to a technical school, sadly, but I've always wondered about dorm life. I think I went to a dorm once, but it's been awhile and so I don't recall much. Regardless, all of the little details have seemed so real and sensible, I can tell that, even if there's some creative license going on that I don't know about, it's mostly accurate. It gives me as many warm fuzzies as the boys do!

And the characters... I love Jak and Daxter here. They're IC; very cute and funny. Having Keira go to another college is the best way to gently remove her from the equation (as well as there not being anything deeper between them to begin with), but she still sends texts and Jak still calls her, which is good. She's in their lives, she's Jak's friend, and I love it. I've never been happy with the authors who seem to have something against the girlfriend character from a franchise. Generally if I've enjoyed a movie, series, or game, and the level of atmospheric intensity isn't through the roof, I end up loving all of the characters to some degree (the reoccurring ones mostly, but also sometimes the one-shots.) Even the ones I don't love, I tend to like or respect, if that makes any sense.

For that reason, while I realize that Errol makes a great villain and he was cool at the Halloween party, I have some mixed feelings on his usage. Then again, I tend to view most of the villains as "just some guy" who ended up where they were because of whatever reasons that they had, for good or bad, and that's why I tend to adore them as well. I wasn't sure how I felt about Errol potentially raping Daxter (even if all he really wanted was to take the bathrobe off to embarrass Dax.) Especially when coupled with Daxter's near rape back-story. I mean, it's realistic. Shit like that can happen and it's sadly very realistic that Daxter would have been suspended as well. It left me a bit uncertain though. I felt perhaps it was a bit over the top, but I kept reading because I was enjoying the story anyway.

Then there's Daxter's overall back story. I realize it makes him sympathetic and explains why he reacts the way that he does. It's pretty much unthinkable for Dax to have parents; he's pretty much an orphan in everyone's minds by now, since nothing has been divulged and probably never will about his family in Sandover. He has to be an orphan, even in a modern AU setting to be him, and realistically people become orphans because their parents died or, the more likely scenario, they came from a broken home-life. It's not the idea itself, you see. I felt perhaps the way it all added up was a bit melodramatic. It's fine. At least one of the Demolition Duo has to have a rough life; they couldn't be who they are otherwise, honestly. It gives sympathy, for the readers and between the characters, and compassion is essential for love. I've read it all and I still enjoyed the thunder storm chapter all the same. And I love Jak's back story as a farm boy. On the whole, it's a minor complaint which I'm not even sure how it might be improved on. I guess mostly I just objected to the near rape, because I felt that Dax had enough for Jak to overcome by that point. And even that I don't mind. I have a very strong knee-jerk reaction to how rape can be so poorly used in fan fiction. This wasn't poorly done by any means; I simply felt it was a little extravagant, but I am probably in the minority there.

Oh and Jinx is perfect! I especially loved how he was worked in. Hah hah! You reminded me of my fondness for the man. I loved him at the party as well, of course. But then the whole party was absolutely perfect anyway.

Ahem, so, keep the chapters coming! This is one of the best AUs that I've read in a long time and trust me, I'm insanely picky about AUs. Most of the time I won't read them, especially if it's any kind of school setting, which is actually why it took me awhile to read this story. Then I read the first chapter and I was instantly hooked. :)

Site is on the fritz again apparently. Or is it just me that can't seem to make a non-anonymous review right now? Anywho...


I was kind of expecting another chapter of Keep Talking next, but was pleasantly surprised to see a new Room and Board. Not that I'm not looking forward to the next chapter of Keep Talking, but since you did leave us on a bit of a cliff hanger with Halloween night, I was looking forward to a resolution even more so. Also, nice touch releasing "the day after Halloween" on the day after Halloween. Was that deadline on purpose?

Loved the bit of conflict thrown in. And from seemingly out of the blue as well (or would it have been more obvious had I read Grimreaperchibi's companion fic?). Razor seeing through the two of them, and how oblivious they are of their situation, was interesting. He tends to do rather well in the role of love guru, despite being a bit of a cold bastard at times eh?

As I said before, I was half expecting Daxter to bolt. Seeing him want to seek Jak out to apologize was a nice bit of character development. Especially when coupled with Dax's realization about how he feels about Jak, and how damn cute he gets when he's flustered. I really don't see how Jak can resist offering more than just a hug to the poor thing!

Anyways, were you planning on doing a Christmas episode next? I'm still really digging the AU plotline, which brings things a bit closer to home, and I'm, as always, anticipating what you'll throw at us next.

Thanks for all the hard work so far this year (you even went and kept to a deadline for us!), and wishing you a happy Thanksgiving and merry Christmas if I don't get the chance later on.