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Ok wow, so I've been a way a long while and had to catch up.

I've read all up and I'm loving it so far :D

I really liked that last outtake at the end about the handjob and the tarantula its so funny!

My only question now is; what is the spice man thing about?

I'm sorry it's taken me so long to review... I'm not quite sure how I managed to convince myself that I had, but, well, you know the kind of week I've been having for the last few.

Anyway! As usual, you are awesome. You do hurt/comfort, and it's still fluffy and cute and ARGH! It makes me want to do fluff and cute and Razer totally won't go for it. At least, not in any sort of meaningful way. Yet. I may be wearing him down, and god knows that at this point, he's a world-class winner of the kicked puppy award. Like always, you've done a great job and I still adore this as much as I did when you sent me the very first part. I'm very glad you're letting me be a part of it.

Now, onward to awkward sexy times!

You've outdone yourself again. That chapter was simply phenomenal! Perfect blend of plot, drama, comedy, and fluff I'd say. Daxter acting ottselish was a nice touch, Sig's role was hilarious, and Jak's situation was totally unexpected and awesome. I also liked how you're setting up some of the stuff for their next semester already with Vin.

I said that I had an idea of what the "bad weather" would lead to, but I was completely off. I figured Dax would go to the game, get sick from the cold, and that Jak would have to nurse him back to health. Having Dax get stuck at work, and Jak get injured really fit much better with the narrative, and I'm glad you're gonna lead that into resolving some of the UST in the next few chapters. Just in time for their winter break I suppose.


Anyways, it's great that the writing is getting easier for you, since that means we get to read it more often ;). Keep up the great work, although I still have no idea how you manage to make it better and better with each chapter.

Both the funniest and the most heartstring-tugging chapter yet. That last line was GENIUS! Keep up the fantastic work!

P.S. Um, I'm almost afraid to ask, but who's topping the first time?

Squee!!

Glad to see that the outtakes and author's notes seems to be working for you. And if it's a cumulative thing, you can always edit the outtakes into the story in previous chapters if you need more room.

Anyways, loved that Jak and Daxter have now both fantasized about each other. It was also a good way to throw in some action without rushing the plot. The build up to this eventual romance is one of the best things about this story, even if I just can't wait for them to finally confess to each other. Jak coddling poor Daxxie after he banged his head was just pure, concentrated warmth. I also liked that you drew attention to Jak's unblemished condition; switching them around like that really works great for this AU.

Have to admit, I was kind of stunned by Razor's condition. Then again, when you've got half a football team going for your blood, I guess it's a testament to his skills that he managed to do as much damage as he did, and come out of it alive.

Anyways, hope this fic is coming easier to you now. You really are doing an amazing job with it! Looking forward to more Keep Talking as well, but don't feel like you have to rush it. We know time spent on one fic means less time for the other, so don't feel bad about any gaps between updates.

Yay, new chapter. Gonna be honest, I squee whenever one comes out.

...Fantastic. I'm not going to lie, it was really hard suppressing my excitement and flails and happy noises when I came to the *ahem* Snow Jobs, as we have discussed. Hubby was right across the room. I had to be subtle. lol.

And okay...Sig as the Old Spice guy? Good Lord are you trying to kill me? I imagined it. It was insanely awesome and surprisingly perfect! I may have to doodle it. Thank you. XD

Daxter really is a good guy, though(when he's not eyeballing and having untoward thoughts about Jak)...After all...As they say, "Bros before psychotic, vindictive cheerleaders!" Even if your bro is Razer.
And even as much as I'm anticipating the fireworks when they finally get their shit together and get with each other, part of me is really, almost sadistically enjoying the sexual tension and occasional panic they're both going through. I too am a horrible person. But I can't help it if these two make for the most appealing awkward sexual tension I've ever seen though!

Killer is trying his best with these clueless boys, the poor little thing!

Yes, we have done an excellent job of being crafty wenches, making them all play nice. I am indeed very proud of us. It's a lot of fun, actually, throwing around these ideas and seeing what takes and what falls to the side. This whole project has been fun, even in the trying times. We should totally have all four going off together about stuff more often. Well...you should. I'll follow the next time, because god knows I can't keep my drama-neko under control. We can do something fluffy and that will totally make up for everything I just did, right? ...Right?

And thank you, by the way. Between you and Muse, I will *never* be able to look at Sig or an Old Spice commercial again. It's just not going to happen. (Maybe if you're really good, the two of us can come up with something for on you that front. She totally ran with it--I'd just transcribe.)

Resolve the sexual tension! At this point I'd settle for a complete wet dream or another accidental lip lock. Hell, a slip of the tongue that leads to awkward confessions would be nice! They are MEANT for each other, so let them get together alreadyq!