rate_review Reviews

I loved the set-up and the emotions being shown, just as much as the actual sex. It's not often I see a 'first lemon' fic done as well as this and I for one highly enjoyed it. Most excellent.

This story totally deserves more than three reviews. So I'm leaving a fourth! Two in a row! =D

Wow, what a great story! And for your first one, very impressive! This is, in my opinion, better than what most veteran fanfiction writers dish out! I only wish she'd have given him a blowjob. Not only would it have provided a much sexier fic, but it'd have been so much more intimate if she took him in her mouth, worked him with her tongue, gave him all those tingling sensations that only oral sex can provide, then opened her eyes nice and wide in surprise at how hard and how much he came. That first blast would hit the back of her throat! She'd swallow his jizz and wipe her mouth. It'd have been awesome! Consider it, yes? can

Not a bad little story for your first time. Not sure if I'd have seen Sally being the one to do that with him but porno rarely walks the grounds of logical sense. lol Only suggestion I may have is to leave he asterisks out of the descriptive parts when they're talking. I'd just try to work that into the story somehow instead. Overall good job, keep at it!

So fucking hot! And well detailed! Much better than the average fic. I wouldn't mind seeing some more. Maybe with Bunnie, too. You have a knack for this and I, for one, and very impressed.