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Again, all the details of the story fit like a puzzle. What I want to know is if their relationship will endure once and if they make it to Outland. I don't want to think that the Draenai couple is some sort of omen. On a happier note, the love making in this chapter (six) was so relaxed. It even made me feel easy-going. Thank you for the chapter.

The action and the sex in this story was much easier to follow - which I'm assuming is part of the mood. I will write a proper review when I'm not falling dead asleep. I found a couple of gems across your written landscape. One of them was "Hands and bodies did the conversing, lips traced eloquent poetry devoid of words across canvases of neck and jaw line, shoulder and chest."

Thank you.

Chapter five has kind of turned most of my attention at the nature of their relationship. So far, the relationship is marked by a strong yet subtle regimen: opposites attract. Almost every contrast compliments their relationship in a way that overcoming the faction rivalry feels natural.

Laina is physically superior (a warrior), self-motivated (exercising to keep in shape), and the more calculative of the two (coming up with the escape plan) although she is the female. These are characteristics we typically think as masculine. On the other hand, Jarlis is nurturing (cares for others), compromises more (accepted his imprisonment in order to survive as long as possible), and is physically inferior to Laina.

These gender reversals are nice gears to kick the story in action. The characters make up the plot as much as they are involved in it.

P.S. Chapter four had an action pace that was a lot easier for me to follow. The suspense was tasteful without being corny. It didn't overwhelm my senses. It was a nice side dish for the chapter that thoroughly complimented the main course. Chapter three's action sequence really kicked my ass. Yet the way the action was told made me feel like Laina was really all business. That mood was captured quite nicely although I didn't digest it as well. Literally, I had to re-read chapter three's action a couple of times. But mneh... I don't follow action too well. I have to stop everything and play it out in my head.

P.P.S. Thank you. Wonderful chapter again.

Hmmmm....here's hoping the demons make a serious error...I would love to see them get what's coming to them.

What words are now engraved into my mind? “I beg your pardon Laina. It WAS quite a show.” It's a compact sentence but full of wit, said in an almost royal way. Also, I cannot stress enough how awesome the pacing of this story is. Every piece of the chapters are meticulously displayed, with no delaying extra baggage. The details direct my imagination but they are not bothersome. For example, though you present the "coordinate facts" about the treasure room, my own imagination glorifies it because you left most of the details blank (i.e. the gold glowed in a strange hue, or the treasure spiraled up in towers crumbling to their own weight). My notions will never compete against a list of details I can conjure up in my mind within seconds of thinking about spare "coordinate facts." What a wonderful story this is turning out to be.

You might be tired of hearing it, but this is good reads.

Wow, this is excellent! I love reading stories written by people who obviously love actually playing the game and doing the quests - all the random dungeon/pvp tools have taken a lot of the reason to quest away which is a shame! It brings back heaps of memories and I have to say, I freakin' hated the quests with those demons in the outlands (...hellfire peninsular is a particular NOT favourite of mine hahaha), although their voices are pretty funny. I like how you started straight away with some action and then integrate descriptions of what the characters are in with the story, instead of saying so and so was this tall, that wide etc, for eg: I figured out the Laina was a warrior because she moved as fast as anyone in plate could. That makes the reading so much more interesting for me and I loved the quip about the magic bags as well as the conversational tone you've written it in but made the dialogue a little more formal when the belf talks, which makes sense. Lucky he is a mage so they get food eh? hehe. So I"m still only half way through your other story but I couldn't wait til I finished that one to read this one, I love your work and this story is very entertaining :D

What a wonderful performance! The pacing was incredible. I think the rape in this chapter really let me know about Laina's strength. On the other hand, I was not expecting Jerlis to be so shrewed. He caught up pretty quickly on how he ended up there, even if it is mostly a very likely speculation. The fact that he remembered that dwarf so well makes me think that the traumatic events - along with the heavy isolation - have really sharpened his senses even though his circumstances are dull. Thank you for this chapter.

As always, good reads.

So far, I am more than pleased to see you back in here. Character development is very good, as always. I can feel much more interest in Laina than Kian because of her attitude. Laina seems to try to make the best of what she has. To be honest, that attitude reminds me a lot of a friend of mine. I can't wait to read the next chapter. Thank you.

This is Good Reads.