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You know, honestly, Jak doesn't get fucked often enough in fanfiction. Sure he does someone, namely Daxter Keira or Ashelin, but he rarely gets done by Daxter so this was especially hot. What would be even better though, would be Dark Jak getting done by Daxter....*sigh* So hot...

Sorry, got carried away, you know? Anyway, thanks for this story, I gotta go see if there are any other Dark Jak stories now, bye! *Waves enthusiastically*

What's the best thing you can give a fangirl with a cold? Hot man-on-man action to make her forget she's sniffling and sounds like a rusty saw blade when she tries to speak. You have simultaneously eased my symptoms and justified my hope in happy endings! Give me your address and I will ship you ten thousand cookies of your choice. Okay, so maybe that's the medicine mostly talking, but I would if you asked. This has totally made my week.

Don't worry about the end-of-story let down too much. There are plenty of plottsels waiting to be adopted out there. One will soon catch your eye and you'll be off and running again. ...Or you'll end up like me with one that refuses to cooperate no matter what you bribe it with and end up with a cold because of all your fussing. This, I am fairly sure, is completely the medicine talking, so I will shush while the shushing still keeps my butt out of trouble.

This was a fabulous story and I can't wait to see what comes next.

this is fantastic work :3 i love fluff between these two <3

Ya kinda made a few mistakes here and there. Ya called Daxter "him" instead of "her" and "he" instead of "she". Still love your story a lot. Awe a Daxy and Jak baby, that would be cute! Hey are you on fanfiction (dot) net?

"We'd be horrible parents." "Yeah, but our kids would be awesome."

Despite the fact that I think they'd be cute as parents (thinking specifically of how Jak interacted with his younger self in game), I don't think truer words have ever been spoken. They're not exactly living the life meant to have young ones underfoot. That, and fem-Dex pregnant is the stuff of nightmares, I swear. Gives me shivers just thinking about it...and so do pink condoms, for the matter. Thank you for helping me realize that.

Sincerely hope having the machine fixed means something good happens next--I know it will since it will be the last chapter, but still! Hope! Hope!

Dax is such a tough little twerp :D I knew she could do it! (It, as in both "get Jak back in the sack" and "kick ass in the Arena".) And, ooh, what's this? Could the return to that long-sought and correct body be imminent? Can't wait for the next bit!

Awww noo..i wanted to read the sex scene! D:

The rest is nice...but i would love to know exactly what has happened...every dirty detail

Oh, I feel so bad for Torn. That is so totally not the best conversation to have unless said friend is really close, and while I see them being friends, I don't necessarily see them being that close. Being the only friend left on the list is a kinda sucky position to be in, but he handled it well and I'm proud of him for that. He's still probably going to end up with nightmares...

And Daxter would be completely justified in smacking the crap out of Jak for jumping to conclusions, preferably with a big foam clue bat.

Bummer...Jak needs to drink more often...of course i know from experience that ya don't remember eveything when your drunk the first few times...hehe...Loved the chapter. Wonder what Dax is gonna say to Jaks revelation?

Torn chuckled. “Piece of advice, Jak. Rough sex doesn't equal rape.”

Torn is smart?! Who knew...? Haha, sorry Torn. But Jak. Poor Jak. Poor, silly, inexperienced Jak. Hopefully Dax can set him straight so they can repeat the experience with a lot less boozes and bruises.