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for Unfathomable - Complete

by ColdSilence

person Talltree-san
schedule January 20, 2012 at 12:00 AM
I really like it so far. I can't wait to read more of it :D!
person Lina
schedule January 11, 2012 at 12:00 AM
I'm so happy you updated. It seems that trouble is brewing.
person hitomi7136
schedule January 10, 2012 at 12:00 AM
please update soon. you waited soooooo long from the first chaper. i want o see wha happens between sora and riku
person Krisin
schedule January 10, 2012 at 12:00 AM
please type up the next chapter soon. I don't think I can wait over another year to read this again
person Lina
schedule March 12, 2011 at 12:00 AM
This is off to a good start. I like the pace you're going in with character development. I'll be waiting for an update. Tell me if you need any help.
person Anon
schedule November 4, 2010 at 12:00 AM
When are going to update? I really like this story and can't wait to see what happens next. Please post the next chapter soon.
person Kristin
schedule October 15, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I absolutly love this story. I can not wait to read the next chapter. Please let Riku and Sora get intimate with eachother. PLEASE update the next chapter very soon!
person crayonbox
schedule October 11, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Aww, Riku, you little determined, yet spoiled rotten little fishcake, you. I adore this first chapter. It's so innocent and cute. And me being a big fan of the little mermaid, I just can't ignore stories like these. I'm already picturing Riku combing his hair with a fork and singing 'part of your world' in clicks and whooshes of air.
And Sora. I just wanna hug him. (I always do.)
What I don't get is... I don't understand the whole dolphin-listening thing Sora's father does, but isn't Riku's language close to that of the dolphin's? Shouldn't Sora's dad pick it up on his equipment? (If I'm wrong, just tell me. I'm horrible with dolphin/mer/fish/shark/ocean languages and keeping them apart.)
Your writing is fluent and nice. (English not being my native tongue, I somethimes trip over words and sentences.)
It took me a while to figure out you where the writer of the alienkittyRoxas story. I loved that story to bits (I think I even have fanart somewhere lying around from yeaaaaars ago).
I hope the muse of this new project of yours will keep flipping it's fishy tail at you. Although, I can't believe you're going to rape it with MPreg... *shrugs* I'll live and read. :D