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I'm glad that there is a nice mermaid story out, especially centered around Riku and Sora. I hope that you keep up the good work and make more chapters for us to enjoy. I think Riku needs a serious wake up call and I hope Sora helps gives it to him.

Have got to say. I've reada many a mermaid fic over the years and some were good, now for KH, not so much but this one, completely blows the others. And the fact that....i'm reading yaoi is a big deal too. I say continue on!!! You've included other charas as well that i'm happy are in it. For instance the BBS crew. Think there will be son Vanitas action soon, if you include him in this story that is. Or heck, the other members of the Org. XIII. I would ask why sin't this great story on fanfiction.net. But it's probably because later on, the reason for why it's on this more adult site will come into play. Cioa for now and hope you finish the next chapter soon!

Man, I can feel the tension all around while reading this chappie. It feels like all hell will brake loose anyday now!

love it. please update real soon. I love it when Sora and Riku interact

Wonder which one will take the leap? Will it be Sora with a fishtail or will Riku some how get to land with a brand new pair of legs? Or will the situation be totally different from what I'm thinking of?

Woo! New chapter! This story is so good. Hope you update soon.

It's very early in the morning for me... far too early to expect anything coherent in the form of words... however, I wished to let you know that I consider this to be VERY well done (I love spoiled jackass-Riku), and I am interested to see where you take this. I saw that the difference between updates (editting?) was quite large, but I hope that you've regained something of a taste for this story, and I sincerely hope that you update soon.

Cheers!

Bligy

Aha, my favorite author is back! Hehe, and still flirting with the boundaries of fanfiction, this time, with little sea creatures! It's your boldness in seeking lands untreaded that is an endearing part of your stories, really, and this is no different. It feels as if this is going to be shorter than Fuzzy Love, as that's what the pacing feels like, at least. The narrative in the first chapter was easily readable and, combined with the POV, had my eyes flying across the pages! The pacing is just right, detailing important events with just the right balance of depth and brevity. One thing I notice is how all the paragraphs are roughly the same length--I think this style maintains readability and a consistent flow, maybe sacrificing a little bit of momentum, but I think it's worth the tradeoff; I'd rather have easily readable paragraphs than walls of texts, in which you've succeeded so far.

As for the story, I will not be shameless in admitting that after being KH shipper for SOOOO long, my blood temperature rose with Riku's upon seeing Sora and Kairi. NOTE, that this isn't an attack against the story, in fact a strength; I think that you at once did two things: 1) established a completely fair relationship in the context of the story (as life progresses, you meet people you love! It's just the way it happens) but AT THE SAME TIME, 2) you provided a point of view that slash readers could sympathize with, at the same time a tongue-in-cheek point that we would be as mature as Riku for feeling so. The way you've seamlessly embedded both views shows your maturity as an author but also as a little slash-devil as well, haha!

I'm loving the tension and conflict that came with the pseudo-org, Riku's audacity, two worlds colliding together, and the broken-hearted boy chasing his heart into a depth he doesn't understand. The moment Riku caught the boy, it felt like the eye of the storm was crossing over, that Riku's lust is an exciting detonation switch for all hell to break loose, for bonds to be broken and reforged, and for hearts crying out to meet in synchrony. I can't fucking wait.

Vaed

P.S. Okay, out of review mode, YAAAAAYAYAYA YOURE BACK ON HERE! WOOOOHOOOOO!!!!! /fanboymode

What do I think of this story in one word? A-mazing~ I wish this were animated... then I could watch all the sparklies glittering off Riku's scales. Is Mer/human sex considered bestiality? I have no idea. I wanna say no because merfolk are half human, but then I can't say it without slight hesitation because they are half fish, and from your description earlier.. Rick has a foot long dolphin penis hidden in his tail. Is it weird that I just had a mini fantasy of him suing it on Sora? -Smh- Maybe it's not so weird, cuz apparently you've entertained the same thought, along with probably 95% of the people who have/are read/ing this fic x) I love FLounder and Sebastian. I keep waiting for Ariel to make an appearance as Riku's sister. Poor Triton, such troublesome MerChildren, and he doesn't even know how troublesome they are! Ahhhhh, i almost which I didn't rediscover you!! [ I fell in love with Fuzzy Love when you first started posting it. You blew my mind with an update every freakin day... needless to say, hmwk was put off until after I read your work or brilliance. I just pimped your fic to a friend of mine earlier, hence how a came across this little pearl, and Dance Together... which was delicious by the way.] Now I'm going to be compulsively checking back here for updates... unless of course, if your on fanfiction . net.... then I can add you to my alert list... Yeah, I think i'm going to internet stalk you after I finish this review. I'm kinda twitching in my seat here, wanting to know what happens next. I totally ignored the superbowl (minus some commercials and half time) for your fic x) I adore you, I'm sending you virtual cuddles in hope that they will encourage your creative juice and inspire you to write more of this story. -cuddles- Sent. Lol okay imma shut up now and let you get back to whatever it was you were doing before you got this email alert x) xoxoxs! ~Kei-Chan

I absolutely adore this story. Please update soon!! I need to read more. As a huge fan of both Kingdom Hearts and The Little Mermaid, this story interests me to no end. I cannot wait to read the next chapter! :D

~Aqua