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October 7, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Heh, I liked this a lot. It's very sweet, clean and touching. I like your characters in this, especially for a one-shot which I don't normally like.
Keep writing. :)
Keep writing. :)
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September 28, 2010 at 12:00 AM
oh yo wassup, aussie writer? I haven't seen anything from you in a while! good to see you're still fic'ing :P
I hesitate to leave a review for this story, because I don't really know what to make of it, but I don't want my internal dilemma to dissuade you from writing more! heh, the first thing I noticed was that- at least to me- you seemed to have taken a different approach to the Light from your other story. I remember pretty clearly that Anarchei thinks of the Light as a mere power source, much like any other power source (heh, I remember because that's how I view it) but here, with the night elf and the pally and the bishop and all that talking about it in much more religious terms, well. it seemed to deviate what what I remember you writing before.
it's interesting, what you write about. you seem to like exploring concepts that aren't really found in the game (class changes, religious tensions between members of the same faction, the nature of magical energy, etc). the way you tell the story is a fine form for exploring those ideas, but I do think this could use some tweaking, if you feel like it :P the night elf, for example, could be explaining his thoughts to a novice or a friend in the Temple of Elune before he leaves, and that way you could show, rather than simply tell, the reader the nature and the strength of the priest's convictions, and what the night elves might actually have to gain as a group in learning from the humans (after all, the other side of the argument, that they are the only ones with a true God on their side, is hardly addressed!). you know, general stuff like that, to add a little weight to the story.
or don't. haha, it's all good.
I hesitate to leave a review for this story, because I don't really know what to make of it, but I don't want my internal dilemma to dissuade you from writing more! heh, the first thing I noticed was that- at least to me- you seemed to have taken a different approach to the Light from your other story. I remember pretty clearly that Anarchei thinks of the Light as a mere power source, much like any other power source (heh, I remember because that's how I view it) but here, with the night elf and the pally and the bishop and all that talking about it in much more religious terms, well. it seemed to deviate what what I remember you writing before.
it's interesting, what you write about. you seem to like exploring concepts that aren't really found in the game (class changes, religious tensions between members of the same faction, the nature of magical energy, etc). the way you tell the story is a fine form for exploring those ideas, but I do think this could use some tweaking, if you feel like it :P the night elf, for example, could be explaining his thoughts to a novice or a friend in the Temple of Elune before he leaves, and that way you could show, rather than simply tell, the reader the nature and the strength of the priest's convictions, and what the night elves might actually have to gain as a group in learning from the humans (after all, the other side of the argument, that they are the only ones with a true God on their side, is hardly addressed!). you know, general stuff like that, to add a little weight to the story.
or don't. haha, it's all good.