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August 18, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Definitely a nice beginning to the story. You really thought out how to relay Layer's form in comparison to that of a human woman's-- though the splitting tongue kind of made me do a double-take to make sure I had read the line correctly.
Not really sure how to go with that without reading it in use.
Overall a pretty good intro/lead-in prior to the truly enjoyable stuff taking place. I won't rate this just yet however, as I'd rather hold out and see how you take the next chapter.
Not really sure how to go with that without reading it in use.
Overall a pretty good intro/lead-in prior to the truly enjoyable stuff taking place. I won't rate this just yet however, as I'd rather hold out and see how you take the next chapter.