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I hope you'll bring this story back from the dead again! Really love the plot and your character writing.

That was an amazing read. Nicely done.

I absolutely love this story. Please update!

Finally, you're back! Welcome! Good to know that you didn't forget us readers. :-)
Nicely done chapter. As I said before, I like your grasp of characters and their relations... Always a pleasure to read. And plot is moving pretty well, for me it's quite unpredictable and intriguing.
Thank you for writing!

craving for further chapters,
Aliat

Wow. Totally blown away by this fic. Your grasp of characterization is impressive, your handle on action moreso since so many people shy away from it. I was completely disappointed to reach the end of what you have so far after devouring it in one sitting. I'm shocked that this doesn't have a kazillion reviews! My only hope is that you're still writing this amazing story. Kudos upon kudos to you, author.

Hello there!

I have read chapters 6 and 7!
It seems to me that now Shepard and her team are forced to make total slaughter there. That is extremely dangerous while all their plans are screwed up. I feel nervous about them.

Saren's story about his brother nearly caused me cry. Scientific researches are so cruel and inhumane! Yet I cannot deny the fact that they are necessary. Just... maybe we just need to learn patience rather than attack first.
Jack is still bad-tempered and foul-mouthed, but she, in fact, became more soft than I remember from the game. Shepard's influence, indeed. At least, Jack is no more "I don't give a fuck" bitch. And her feelings towards Shepard add a little bit of sweetness to her character. I always knew she is nice somewhere deep in her heart :-D
It was very kind of Shepard to give a chance to that little slave girl. If she manages to get to the ship unharmed, I'm sure she'll be safe around Shepard's crew.

I really love to read your story!
I found it there some time ago and was a little bit sad and disappointed that the story wasn't updated for so long. Now I'm very happy to read more of it!
Thank you very much for your great, rich language and truly interesting and engaging plot! And of course, for keeping all characters in their real nature, not trying to twist them in something opposite.

I like the way you are showing Shepard. Not the emotionless robot-like soldier, but a living human being with her own vulnerable points and strong sides. Another thing I really appreciate is Garrus and Wrex' s friendship. It's always good to have a friend to watch your back, right? I'm glad that Garrus wouldn't be alone in his investigations. (always hated his arrogant "stand-alone" views)
And, ah, de-indoctrinated Saren is quite a riddle! His intents and goals - I mean, true goals, - remain mystery for me. I don't think he was straight enough with his "miraculous rebith" story, maybe there was more in background than he had told.

That's all my thoughts for now. Thank you for your amazing story! I'd be very happy to read further.

I don’t check up on this site often but I’m glad I checked tonight. I really do love this story. It’s pretty much on a level all its own compared to most stories here. Not that there aren’t good stories here, but even most the good ones are just plot-less smut fests. I like smut, I wouldn’t be here if I didn’t, but it’s a good story that really draws me in. And that’s what you’ve got here, a good story. So try not to get too discouraged if people don’t leave reviews: I bet there’s a hell of a lot of people ghost-reading this.

I’d love to chat but I don’t really feel comfortable revealing my email in a review here. Thar be trolls and all that. If only AFF had a Private messaging system, huh?

So, just wanted to pop in and say I’m really glad you’re still writing for this. Also, this chapter makes me want to see a buddy-cop movie starring Garrus and Wrex. It would be glorious. I nearly lost my shit when Wrex started moving the salarian’s body around like a puppet.

Great chapter! I can't wait to see what happens next! :)

It's rare to find a story that has an interesting and original plot especially on this site. I'm really liking this so far especially since you've got Garrus and Wrex (the two best characters in the series) working as a badass team now. Just wanted to let you know that I'm a fan, can't wait for the next chapter.

I am so excited to see more of this. It's late at night right now and I'm too tired to give you the nice long review that you deserve but, long story sort, this fanfic is awesome. You definitely have a real feel for the characters; I felt like I was watching a scene in the game. I liked the tension between Garrus and Shepard; regardless of whether or not they're just friends or secretly harboring deeper feelings, the reactions were believable. And I love that Wrex saw what was going on and ended up following after Garrus for both the turian's and Shepard's sake. That's why Wrex is a true bro. My only criticism is that you wrote Elusive Man instead of Illusive Man, but that's such a minor, trivial detail in the grand scheme of things. Bottom line: This story is amazing and I hope you continue writing it.