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January 20, 2014 at 12:00 AM
I have to admit this is good. Most erotic stories are a wam bam thank you mam and you move on. Even after the act I was drawn to keep reading there this hint of humor and deep story it's not often I enjoy reading erotic stories for more then a quick thrill you are indeed quite a good author
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May 30, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Where is my harem ending?
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January 1, 2013 at 12:00 AM
AWESOME story! I'd love to read more chapters perhaps exploring Saria's and Links exploits with other "chippies" lol.
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June 5, 2012 at 12:00 AM
amazing story. i couldve done without all the stuttering but you did well painting the imagery and letting the angst and childhood naivete shine through. and the alternate endings, very cool and unusual. loved every minute.
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January 8, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I kind of hoped Link would have chosen all four of them, you know?
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November 30, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Well written with distinct, interesting characters. And there's no question that it's hot. Nonetheless, a few parts bothered me. Saria losing control was just weird. Wanting it desperately and throwing good sense to the wind, sure, but the way you wrote it she seemed genuinely unable to stop.
And it was actually rather disturbing how these kids (Link is either 10 or twelve, depending on which official guide you trust) show so much self-loathing in each chapter. They're all at a reasonable age to be exploring their sexuality, and I would expect that in a relatively medieval setting girls would learn about sex at a somewhat younger age considering that historically the marriageable age has been much younger than it is today. But they all seem gripped by...moral self-hatred, I suppose, when it doesn't seem likely that any of them would understand their sexuality to an extent to actually be so depressed by it. Link in particular clearly knows nothing about any of this in the first chapter, making it inconsistent when he later seems to have suspected that multiple relationships was a bad idea. All he should know is that his friends are yelling at him. He might decide that it's a bad idea from that, but he wouldn't know before then. As for the rest, though they might be uneasy, or might have been told in the past that this sort of thing is wrong, it's not guaranteed, and they certainly wouldn't at that age really understand what they were told. Today, puritanical though we are, kids their age will do sexual things together as they more or less figure things out. I sincerely doubt that they are crying about their sinful nature as they do so.
A harem chapter would actually be an excellent addition if you ever decide to write more. Multiple wives was acceptable, even normal, throughout much of history, and in fact still is in many parts of the world. Moreover, it makes sense that Link would, distraught as he is, find it reasonable. He doesn't want to hurt any of them, and he has by the point he decides at least some idea that by choosing one he'll be turning away the rest, and that any of them will be hurt by that. I know it's "traditional" for male heroes to lack tear ducts, but really him breaking down and crying, still confused about why they are all fighting, would be an entirely reasonable response. And as angry as everyone is, surely they'd have some idea at that point that they are hurting him too.
In the end definitely one of the best stories on the site. It could just be even better.
And it was actually rather disturbing how these kids (Link is either 10 or twelve, depending on which official guide you trust) show so much self-loathing in each chapter. They're all at a reasonable age to be exploring their sexuality, and I would expect that in a relatively medieval setting girls would learn about sex at a somewhat younger age considering that historically the marriageable age has been much younger than it is today. But they all seem gripped by...moral self-hatred, I suppose, when it doesn't seem likely that any of them would understand their sexuality to an extent to actually be so depressed by it. Link in particular clearly knows nothing about any of this in the first chapter, making it inconsistent when he later seems to have suspected that multiple relationships was a bad idea. All he should know is that his friends are yelling at him. He might decide that it's a bad idea from that, but he wouldn't know before then. As for the rest, though they might be uneasy, or might have been told in the past that this sort of thing is wrong, it's not guaranteed, and they certainly wouldn't at that age really understand what they were told. Today, puritanical though we are, kids their age will do sexual things together as they more or less figure things out. I sincerely doubt that they are crying about their sinful nature as they do so.
A harem chapter would actually be an excellent addition if you ever decide to write more. Multiple wives was acceptable, even normal, throughout much of history, and in fact still is in many parts of the world. Moreover, it makes sense that Link would, distraught as he is, find it reasonable. He doesn't want to hurt any of them, and he has by the point he decides at least some idea that by choosing one he'll be turning away the rest, and that any of them will be hurt by that. I know it's "traditional" for male heroes to lack tear ducts, but really him breaking down and crying, still confused about why they are all fighting, would be an entirely reasonable response. And as angry as everyone is, surely they'd have some idea at that point that they are hurting him too.
In the end definitely one of the best stories on the site. It could just be even better.
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July 28, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Well, all in all really good. I loved the Ruto scenes the best but lots of hotness and good characterizations all around. I was hoping that the official ending would be the full harem, but the last alternate will have to suffice. Hope your next story is as good.
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July 24, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I really like the alternate ending approach here :) It makes sense to see why Link would choose each of the girls, there are good reasons in favor of each one. Nice job!
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July 22, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Nice Story. For one of the ending I hope there is a harem ending.
the off girls can be Zelda's hand maids or Lady in waiting or something
the off girls can be Zelda's hand maids or Lady in waiting or something
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July 20, 2010 at 12:00 AM
This is the BEST fic I have ever read, I never knew Saria x Malon would make a good pairing.
I can't wait for your Malon alternate ending as she is my preferred loz characterby far.
This kept me up many nights :P there should be a warning on it for how great it is.
Hope you write more! Exellent fic :)
I can't wait for your Malon alternate ending as she is my preferred loz characterby far.
This kept me up many nights :P there should be a warning on it for how great it is.
Hope you write more! Exellent fic :)